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Question: Imagine that there is a large piece of vacant land in your town. What is the best way to make use of it? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
For centuries getting the land was one of the controversial issues for people. That depends on specifics of law system, high taxes, unaffordable prices or a headache with property documents. All these issues relate mostly to big cities and megapolises. Living in the capital I can perceive that a lot of pieces of land or former residency buildings are just staying for years without using not far from downtown. All of them are mostly needed for reconstruction and repairment. There are plenty of decisions to use this area useful and properly: free outside sports center, a place for reading, small farm for children who are in hospitals.
Speaking about children hospitals in Ukraine, it is worth mentioning that hospitals do not provide a lot of interesting activities during the kid`s treatment. Even though they have quite a vacant land on the yard or nearly. That is why some non-governmental organizations take the initiation and launch different projects, using unnecessary territories in the city.
A clear example of using the land appropriate is when I participated in the amazing project. We planned and dug small garden on the territory of the children hospital, invited all kids and held them open Biology class. Together we planted berries, flowers and vegetables in order children observe then the growing of the garden and harvest the fruits in a few months.
One another example when a group of activists dealt with the mayor of the town and proposed to reformat small neglected area in the city center and make a tiny green park and place for rest.
To sum up, even small vacant piece of land can be used very reasonably and brings important changes to the well-being of the city.
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Could you please correct my small essay? Thank you very much
Question: Imagine that there is a large piece of vacant land in your town. What is the best way to make use of it? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.For centuries getting land was controversial. It depended on specific laws, high taxes, unaffordable prices or a headache with deeds of estate. All these issues related mostly to big cities and megapolises. Living in the capital I see that a lot of pieces of land or former residential buildings are just left for years unoccupied not far from downtown. All of them are in need of reconstruction and repair. There are plenty of choices on how to used these areas and property: free outside sports center, a place for reading, small farm for children who are in hospitals.
Speaking about children hospitals in Ukraine, it is worth mentioning that hospitals do not provide a lot of interesting activities during the kid`s stay, even though they have quite a bit of vacant land in the yard or nearby. That is why some non-governmental organizations take the initiative and launch different projects, using unused city areas.
A clear example of using the land appropriately/wisely is when I participated in an amazing project. We planned and dug small garden on the land of the children's hospital, invited all the kids and held an open Biology class for them. Together we planted berries, flowers and vegetables in order that the children could see the growth in the garden and harvest the fruits in a few months.
One another example was when a group of activists dealt with the town mayor and proposed to reformat a small neglected area in the city center and make a tiny green park and place for rest.
To sum up, even small vacant pieces of land can be used very reasonably and bring important changes to the well-being of the city.
Very well written!
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