Should we Focus on Making New Friends or Keeping Old Friends
When it comes to discussing the topic of keeping old friends and making new friends, a heated debate necessarily takes place. While some people assert that comparing to the significant importance of making new friends, keeping old friends is not so necessary. However, from my standpoint, making new friends is a necessity for everyone indeed, but we cannot ignore the great significance of keeping your old friends as well.
To begin with, old friends are those who know you well and you can rely on when you are in trouble. Everyone needs good friends like this. Take my friend Derek who was my classmate when we were in primary school for instance, we have been friends since our childhood and until today, whenever he is faced with difficulties, he will turn to me for help and I will support him with everything I have because I know, he will do the same thing for me as well. An old friend like that would be the most precious possession to everybody. New friends, however, would not know you as old friends, and they are possibility not as reliable and helpful when you stuck.
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Should we Focus on Making New Friends or Keeping Old Friends
When it comes to discussing the topic of keeping old friends and making new friends, a heated debate necessarily takes place. While some people assert that comparing to the significant importance of making new friends, keeping old friends is not so necessary. However, from my standpoint ( in my opinion sounds better or you could use in my perspective too), making new friends is a necessity for everyone indeed, but we cannot ignore the great significance of keeping your old friends as well.To begin with, old friends are those who know you well and you can rely on when you are in trouble. Everyone needs good friends like this. Take my friend Derek who was my classmate when we were in primary school for instance, we have been friends since our childhood and until today, whenever he is faced with difficulties (this sentence could be shortened, for instance: For example my friend Derek who was my classmate in primary school, has been a friend since childhood), he will turn to me for help and I will support him with everything I have because I know, he will do the same thing for me as well. An old friend like that would be the most precious possession to everybody. New friends, however, would not know you as much as old friends, and they are possibility ( possibly) not as reliable and helpful when you are stuck.
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Comments from Camilo: Very good effort and interesting topic, a tip in English that I received from my thesis supervisor is: try to communicate big ideas in a brief way without too many words. Also what could help your writing if you are improving it to take a TOEFL or IELTS test one day would be to write a topic like this on an essay format, with Introduction-Arguments-Conclusion structure type.
Keep it up with the English and hope you are having fun!
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Should we Focus on Making New Friends or Keeping Old Friends
When it comes to discussing the topic of keeping old friends and making new friends, a heated debate necessarily takes place. While some people assert that comparing to the significant importance of making new friends, keeping old friends is not so necessary. However, from my standpoint, making new friends is a necessity for everyone indeed, but we cannot ignore the great significance of keeping your old friends as well.To begin with, old friends are those who know you well and you can rely on when you are in trouble. Everyone needs good friends like this. Take my friend Derek who was my classmate when we were in primary school for instance. We have been friends since our childhood and to this today. Whenever he is faced with difficulties, he will turn to me for help. I will support him with everything I have because I know, he will do the same thing for me. An old friend like that would be the most precious possession to everybody. New friends, however, would not know you as old friends, and they are possibility not as reliable and helpful when you stuck.
Here is part of my work, really appreciate your corrections!
Excellent text. However, try to keep your sentences shorter, 15 or 18 words. The longer your sentence, the more difficult it is to understand.
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