How has financial crisis affected daily life in Spain?

Hello, this is the text I wrote in an exam several months ago. It has already been corrected by my English teacher, but I wish to do an experiment and compare his correction to the italki community's. I will include all of my mistakes that were corrected by my teacher too:

Spain's financial crisis has affected the country in many diferent ways. One important sector that has been affected by the recession is the working sector. That is why, the large amount of unemployed citizens has increased dramatically during the last decade.On one hand, there are qualified Spanish workers whose skills are wasted in a country that has no job opportunities and who choose to move to other nations, hoping for a better life. On the other hand, Spain has many cash-short unemployed consumers who depend on the state to live decently and whose money is strictly spent on cheap store brands and staple products.
Also, there are many adventurous people who decide to open their own little stores and sell national products like fruits, vegetables and clothes. Instead of importing them from other countries like other big companies do. And these stores are usually successful because of their conventional prices.
Finally, another sector affected by the crisis are the many students who, despite of their desire to study a career and get a good job, they dismiss the idea because they have no financial support from their universities. Because the loans they receive from them are small and  they are uncertain about finding a job in a country that has few to offer.

This is it. I wrote as it was, without correcting any mistakes. Maybe you'll find some typos that weren't in the original text.
As I was writing this, I cringed at how childish my writing was. I'm glad italki has helped me improve a little bit.

How has financial crisis affected daily life in Spain?

Hello, This is the text I wrote in an exam several months ago. It has already been corrected by my english teacher, but I wish to do an experiment and compare his correction to the italki community's. I will include all of my mistakes that were corrected by my teacher too:

Spain's financial crisis has affected the country in many different ways. One important area (to use more varied vocabulary) that has been affected by the recession is the employment sector. This is evidenced by the large amount of unemployed citizens increasing dramatically during the last decade. On the one hand, there are qualified Spanish workers whose skills are wasted in a country that has no job offers and who choose to move to other nations, hoping for a better life. On the other hand, Spain has many cash-short unemployed consumers who depend on the State to live decently and whose money is strictly spent on cheap store brands and staple products.
Also, there are many adventurous people who decide to open their own little stores and sell nationally produced products like fruits, vegetables and clothes instead of importing them from other countries, like other big companies do. And These stores are usually successful because of their fixed, low prices.
Finally, another group affected by the crisis are the many students who, despite of their desire to study for a degree and get a good job,  are forced to dismiss the idea because they have no financial support from their universities, the loans they receive from them are small and because they are uncertain about finding a job in a country that has none to offer.

This is it. I wrote as it was, without avoiding any mistakes. Maybe you'll find some typo's that weren't in the original text.
As I was writing this, I cringed at how childish my writing was. I'm glad italki has helped me improve a little bit.