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Talk about myself I'm interested in playing football,watching the movie and travelling.In the first place,I've been playing football since I was young,so I woud like to watch the warld cup in this year.Then I really like to watch the movie.Recently,I watched ''greatest showman''that is very fantastic movie.In addition,I prefer to travel to other country and I really like to talk to foreigner about any topics.Actually,I'm planning to various country from now on.Thanks.

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Talking about myself

I'm interested in playing football, watching movies and travelling.  I enjoy travelling to other countries and talking to the local people.  I'm planning to visit many countries in the future. 

I've been playing football since I was young, so I would like to watch the World Cup this year.  

Recently, I watched '' The Greatest Showman'' which is a fantastic movie.

Thanks

That was very badly jumbled and disconnected. 

Talking about myself

MY NAME is (your name)

I enjoy travelling to other countries and talking to the local people.  I'm planning to visit many countries in the future. 

I also like playing football, I've been playing football since I was young, so I would like to watch the World Cup this year.  

Recently, I watched '' The Greatest Showman'' which is a fantastic movie.

Thanks

MY NAME is (your name)

I am Interested in travelling to other countries and talking to the local people, playing football and watching movies.

 I plan to visit many countries in the future.

I've been playing football since I was young, so I would like to watch the World Cup this year.  

Recently, I watched '' The Greatest Showman'' which is a fantastic movie.

Thanks

it's very repetitive constantly repeating I, I, and I 

Without re-writing it from scratch and completely changing all of your writing.

The last version is probably the shortest and more fluent natural way you could write it


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Talk about myself

I'm interested in playing football, watching movies and traveling. Firstly, I've been playing football since I was young, so I would like to watch the World Cup in this year. Then I really like to watch movies. Recently, I watched '' The Greatest Showman'' which is a fantastic movie. In addition, I enjoy traveling to other countries and talking to natives (I assume you mean people living in the countries that you visit. A foreigner is a person that comes into your own country) about any topic. Actually, I'm planning to visit a lot of countries in the future. Thanks.

As mentioned before you don't have to connect all the sentences with "I"

I changed your second to last sentence a little bit so you can see how you can connect them.
"In addition, I enjoy traveling to other countries and talking to natives about any topic."
Be careful of the grammatical rules when writing.
"The Greatest Showman" is a name of a movie and is written with capital letters.
Also watching THE movie would mean you like watching one particular movie, so you should say "I like watching movies"
Also after a full stop (.) and a comma (,) you should leave a space ( )

Good job, keep it up!

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you need to look at what you wrote in previous sentences. To check for flow and fluency. you have continuity problems why did you say firstly when by the time the readers get to the word "Firstly" it is not the first thing (firstly) it is now the second or third thing. "watching movies is a real passion of mine" "travelling and meeting new people is something I adore" "watching and playing football is a regular weekly occurrence for me" "going to see the movie The greatest Showman was a real​ thrill for me"
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Thanks.Actually,I have no reason to use " I " every sentence. Do you mind if you tell me what am I supposed to meke sentences？
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Dude, your first two sentences read okay to me. But the rest is not well connected. Will you tell me why you have to prefer "I" as the starting point of every sentence?

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