IELTS-letter You are studying a short course in another country. Your accommodation was arranged by the course provider. There is a major problem with the accommodation. Write a letter to the course p

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IELTS-letter You are studying a short course in another country. Your accommodation was arranged by the course provider. There is a major problem with the accommodation. Write a letter to the course provider. In your letter, say what the problem is describe the accommodation you thought you were getting ask the provider to solve the problem Dear Mr. Smith, I am writing to bring to your attention the problem that I encountered in my apartment. The situation is that the refrigerator has been broken since I moved into the apartment on last Friday. I have planned to go to the supermarket to buy my food once a week as I want to focus on my course. However, this accident makes me spend much more time on purchasing food and preparing mealsl every day because there is no refrigerator to store them. In my mind, the accommodation which you supply should be a nice, cozy and comfortable one. I suppose the apartment should be equipped with a TV set, a refrigerator, an air-conditioner etc. On the contrary, the reality did disillusion me as there is only a broken refrigerator. I hope you could solve this problem by means of fixing the old fridge or buying a new one. I would be extremely grateful if you could help me to settle down and devote myself into my course as soon as possible. Yours sincerely

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IELTS-letter

You are studying a short course in another country. Your accommodation was arranged by the course provider. There is a major problem with the accommodation.
Write a letter to the course provider. In your letter,
say what the problem is
describe the accommodation you thought you were getting
ask the provider to solve the problem

Dear Mr. Smith,

I am writing to bring to your attention the problem that I encountered in my apartment.

The situation is that the refrigerator has been broken since I moved into the apartment on last Friday. I had planned to go to the supermarket to buy my food once a week as I want to focus on my course. However, this accident has made me spend much more time on purchasing food and preparing mealsl every day because there is no refrigerator in which to store them.

In my mind(3), the accommodation which you supply should be a nice, cozy and comfortable one(1). I believe the apartment should be equipped with a TV set, a refrigerator, an air-conditioner etc. However(2), the reality did disillusion me as there is only a broken refrigerator.

I hope you could solve this problem by means of fixing the old fridge or buying a new one. I would be extremely grateful if you could help me to settle down and devote myself into my course as soon as possible.

Yours sincerely

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One difficult aspect of these IELTS questions is they require you to use your imagination to invent a problem. This means you have to use good English, while also being creative about your story. The fridge works as a nice example, but I think you could have added an additional problem. I felt that for the second half of the letter, you were finding it difficult to write something meaningful.

(1) Words like 'nice' and 'cozy' aren't appropriate for a letter to a landlord. 'cozy' is very 花. They're too vague. 'comfortable' is okay. You could add 'well maintained' or 'properly equipped'.

(2) 'On the contrary' is used to link ideas that contradict each other, not an idea and a situation. Example:

A: I believe the apartment should be properly equipped.

B: On the contrary, the contract clearly states the apartment is unfurnished.

(3) 'In my mind' is okay... I feel like I would say "To my mind". You could also use "In my opinion..." or "As far as I'm concerned..."

I would suggest you to delete most of unnecessary content in this letter so people can understand this complaint better. The simplest ever one could be: Dear landlord, I found the fridge in my apartment is never functional properly and I really need your help! I am desperately looking for the solution now. Please contact me as soon as possible. Regards -

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