Private Cars and Level of Pollution (IELTS writing task 2)
Over the last years, the number of private cars has been steadily rising in urban context. This fact is mainly due to their more and more affordable price, as well as their higher comfortability and security compared to alternative means of public transport. These vehicles are also responsible of the increasing level of pollution through the exploitation of fossil fuels. Many scientists argue that if this level does not start dropping, there might be severe consequences on our health and planet.
A first suggestion for all careless car drivers is to change their harmful habit by adopting eco-friendly solutions. First of all, they should be encouraged to move by means of transport that do not consume fossil fuels at all, such as bicycles, eco – buses or simply walking on foot. Secondly, if the car is strictly required because of the long distance from a destination, it may be beneficial both economically and environmentally to ask an acquaintance for a ride.
Unfortunately, many people firmly claim that there are no evidences of the impact of cars on the environment. In regard to this, the issue needs being treated through reports and documentaries and spread across information media, so that all urban citizens can realize to which extent the fossil fuels can be harmful. Moreover, local governments can discourage the use of cars by raising the cost of fossil fuels, similarly as the measures taken to fight against the cigarette smoke.
In conclusion, I believe that car drivers absolutely need to try out different methods for moving around an urban area. Moreover, for drivers sceptical about their responsibility, awareness campaigns must urge to reason about the effects their habit may have on lungs and on the global warming.
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Private Cars and Level of Pollution (IELTS writing task 2)
Over the last years, the number of private cars has been steadily rising in the urban context. This fact is mainly due to their more and more affordable price, as well as their greater comfort and security compared to alternative means of public transport. These vehicles are also responsible for the increasing level of pollution through the exploitation of fossil fuels. Many scientists argue that if this level does not start dropping, there might be severe consequences for our health and planet.A first suggestion for all careless car drivers is to change their harmful habit by adopting eco-friendly solutions. First of all, they should be encouraged to travel by means of transport that does not consume fossil fuels at all, such as bicycles, eco – buses or simply walking. Secondly, if the car is really necessary because of the long distance from a destination, it may be beneficial both economically and environmentally to ask an acquaintance for a ride.
Unfortunately, many people firmly claim that there is no evidence of the impact of cars on the environment. In regard to this, the issue needs being treated through reports and documentaries and spread across the media, so that all urban citizens can realize to what extent fossil fuels can be harmful. Moreover, local governments can discourage the use of cars by raising the cost of fossil fuels, similar to the measures taken to fight against cigarette smoke.
In conclusion, I believe that car drivers absolutely need to try out different methods of moving around an urban area. Moreover, for drivers, sceptical about their responsibility, awareness campaigns must urge them to ponder the effects their habit may have on lungs and global warming.
Hello Simone,
This is a well laid out essay, it follows a logical order and has one theme in each paragraph. There is a lot of good high level language but I have made corrections where I think it could be improved.
If you have any questions, please send me a message
Best wishes
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