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LIDSEY STRIRLING A SPECIAL ARTIST
Lidsey was born in Calinfornia, EE.UU. Was born in September 21ST 1986.
She is a musician; was in differents National Contests and is characterized for her good ability to play violin while dance. She played in clubs of Los Angéles, California, sometimes still do it, had playing in NBA games and others places around of the country.
She opened the show of some artists like; Sean Kingston, Donny Osmond, Jon Muguruza, Allan Jackson… And others.
When she was 23 years old, was finalist of the Fifth Season of America Got Talent, when she was know like “Hip - Hop Violinist”.
She learned top lay violin from 12 years old, and when was 16. Was in a Rock Band, with four friends.
Now she’s studying Therapeutic Recreation in Brigham Young University. She says that wishes be a positive model for youth.
Two years ago, I listen her music. She is a too talent girl and very inspiring.
Her music is some different, and I consider her a special artista. Someday I would like be as she.
Not making the same things, I want to say, I want to inspire the people to do good things, through of my job. I’m writer, and I want to help many persons with my books.
We are here for a propuse, and everyone the persons that we’re in the land have talents and abilities that help with the personal evolution. We can be better with our dreams, we can help with love and we can feel the beautiful and real life.
So, why to fear to make our dreams reality?
Just we have to believe in ourself, and in everyting that we want to do, we should believe in everyone of the abilities that we have, all our talents and believe in the persons that are in our around.
Because, they make part of our life.
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COULD YOU HELP ME WITH THIS TEXT?
LIDSEY STRIRLING A SPECIAL ARTISTLidsey was born in Calinfornia, EE.UU. Was born in on September 21ST 1986.
She is a musician; she was in differents National Contests and is characterized for her good ability to play violin while dance dancing. She played in clubs of Los Angéles, California, sometimes still does it, had playing and has played in NBA games and others places around of the country.
She has opened the show of some artists like; : Sean Kingston, Donny Osmond, Jon Muguruza, Allan Jackson… And and others.
When she was 23 years old, she was the finalist of the Fifth Season of America's Got Talent, when she was known like as “ The Hip - Hop Violinist”.
She learned top lay to play violin from at 12 years old, and when was 16. Was she was in a Rock Band rock band with four friends.
Now she’s studying Therapeutic Recreation in at Brigham Young University. She says that wishes be a positive model for youth.
Two years ago, I listened to her music. She is a too very talent girl and very inspiring.
Her music is something different, and I consider her a special artista. Someday I would like be as she. Someday I want to be like her.
Not making doing the same things, I want to say (or speak), I want to inspire the people to do good things, through of my job. I’m writer, and I want to help many persons people with my books.
We are here for a purpose, and everyone the persons that we’re in the land ( "everyone on earth/everyone in the world")have has talents and abilities that help with the personal evolution. We can be better with our dreams, we can help with love and we can feel (have) the beautiful and real life.
So, why to fear to make our dreams reality?
Just we We just have to believe in ourself, and in everything that we want to do, we should believe in everyone of the abilities that we have, all our talents and believe in the persons that are in our around.
Because, they make a part of our life.
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Lily did a good job offering corrections. I just want to add two things.
She is a very talented girl. (adding "ed" to "talent" changes it from a noun to an adjective).
Lidsey was born in California, EE.UU.
When writing in English, it is best to write "the United States" instead of "EE.UU." EE.UU. is the abbreviation used in Spanish; in English we use the abbreviation U.S. or U.S.A. (Funny story... The first time I saw EE.UU. while chatting with someone from a Spanish speaking country, I had no idea what they were referring to. I asked, "Are you talking about the European Union?" And they said, "No, EE.UU. -- that is YOUR country." Ha ha).
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Thank you Lily Camile!
Yes, I did it. I loved it :)
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Great entry! Have you see this little clip about her? https://www.mormon.org/me/b1nv
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