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Jessie
My Father's Day Today is my Dad's birthday. After class, I called him then I said "what do you want to eat for late night snack?" He told me "just buy two cans of beer to drink with me!" But I found I forgot my wallet.. So I turned home and shout to him "I forgot to bring my wallet!!!" And he said : I borrow you! Than I said: thank you, I'll buy some fried chicken! OK, nothing special, but the important thing is that I didn't spend any money for my father's birth!! hahaha

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My Father's Day

Today is my dad's birthday.
After class, I called him then I and said, "What do you want to eat for a late night snack?" He told me, "Just buy two cans of beer to drink with me!"
But I found I had forgotten my wallet.
So I turned home and shouted to him, "I forgot to bring my wallet!!!"
And he said //or "replied"//,  "I'll borrow loan/lend you some money!" 
Then I said, "Thank you, I'll buy some fried chicken!" 

OK, nothing special, but the important thing is that I didn't spend any money for my father's birthday!! hahaha

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Very nice work! I enjoyed the story and hope your father had a lovely day!

Notes:

1. We do not capitalize words such as father/dad, mother/mom, sister, brother, etc. because they are common nouns. It is different, however, if we are speaking directly to the person and using the noun as a name for the person (e.g. You're so funny, Dad!"); in such a case, the word becomes a proper noun and must be capitalized. 

2. Note the proper way to introduce a quotation:  I said, "Blah, blah, blah."  After the verb, add a comma...and then write the quotation, beginning with a capital letter.


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My Father's Day

Today is my Dad's birthday.
After class, I called him then I said "what do you want to eat for late night snack?" He told me "just buy two cans of beer to drink with me!"
But I found I forgot my wallet..
So I turned home and shout to him "I forgot to bring my wallet!!!"
And he said : I borrow you!  ( what is it you are trying to say here? Did he loan you money? 
Than I said: thank you, I'll buy some fried chicken!

OK, nothing special, but the important thing is that I didn't spend any money for my father's( it is important to write out the full word because if you say "birth" alone you are saying that he was literally born that day and not referring to celebration of his birth.) birthday!! hahaha

Good job overall. :)

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