Search from various English teachers...
Russia flagMaria
Please guys help me with it! Thank you everyone! :) My name is Maria. I’m 29 years old. I’ve been living in Saint-Petersburg for 15 years. Let me give you some information about my educational background: I graduated from high school here. Also I graduated with distinction from Saint-Petersburg Marine Technical University. I studied in the Faculty of Business Economics and Management and I qualified as an economic-manager. Now, I would like to tell you about my work experience. Last 5 years I worked for a large Russian company which has approximately 20 boutiques of world-wide brands watches and jewelry in diverse regions of Russia. There are 10 shops in Moscow and 5 shops in Saint-Petersburg. I had started my career as a sales assistant then I was promoted to store manager. I was working 3 years in a senior position. My main responsibilities were to support and encourage staff, to provide the highest level of customers’ service, to resolve all client problems and complaints, to achieve personal and store sales goals, to develop lasting client relationships and, of course, to provide staff supervision and guidance. I deal with a lot of different kinds of people and I understood a lot about human’s behavior. It was great experience for me. Finally, I quit my job and I had some reason to make this decision: my opinion is if you work too much in one place, it gets bad for your carrier and your professional skills. Every moment of life you have to learn something new and if your job becomes routine all the time you have to change the place.

Corrections · 8

1

Please guys help me with it! Thank you everyone! :)

My name is Maria. I’m 29 years old. I’ve been living in Saint-Petersburg for 15 years. Let me give you some information about my educational background: I graduated from high school here. Also I graduated from Saint-Petersburg Marine Technical University with a high degree. I studied in the Faculty of Business Economics and Management and I qualified as an economic-manager.
Now, I would like to tell you about my work experience. The last 5 years I worked for a large Russian company which has approximately 20 boutiques selling some of the world's leading brands of watches and jewelry in diverse regions of Russia. There are 10 shops in Moscow and 5 shops in Saint-Petersburg. I had started my career as a sales assistant then I was promoted to store manager.
I was working 3 years in a senior position. My main responsibilities were to support and encourage staff, to provide the highest level of customer service, to resolve all client problems and complaints, to achieve personal and store sales goals, to develop lasting client relationships and, of course, to provide staff supervision and guidance. I dealt with a lot of different kinds of people and I understand a lot about human behaviour. It was a great experience for me.
Finally, I quit my job and I had some reason to make this decision: my opinion is if you work too much in one place, it is bad for your career and your professional skills. Every moment of life you have to learn something new and if your job becomes routine all the time you have to change the place.
1

Please guys help me with it! Thank you everyone! :)

My name is Maria, 29 years old, I’ve been living in Saint-Petersburg for 15 years. Let me tell you something about my educational background. I graduated from high school here, then I graduated from Saint-Petersburg Marine Technical University with a higher degree. I studied in the Faculty of Business Economics and Management where I qualified as an economic-manager.
Now, I would like to tell you about my work experience. For the last 5 years I worked for a large Russian company which has approximately 20 boutiques of world-wide brand watches and jewelry in diverse regions of Russia. There are 10 shops in Moscow and 5 in Saint-Petersburg. I started my career as a sales assistant and was later promoted to store manager.
I was working 3 years in a senior position. My main responsibilities were to support and encourage staff, to provide the highest level of customer service, to resolve client problems and complaints, to achieve personal and store sales goals, to develop lasting client relationships and, of course, to provide staff supervision and guidance. I dealt with many different people and I understood a lot about human behavior. It was great experience for me.
Finally, I quit my job as I believe that if you work too much in one place, it is bad for your career and your professional skills. Every moment of life you have to learn something new and if your job becomes routine you have to change it.

Very well written!

1

Please guys help me with it! Thank you everyone! :)

My name is Maria. I’m 29 years old. I’ve been living in Saint-Petersburg for 15 years ("I've lived in Saint-Petersburg for 15 years").

Let me give you some information about my educational background:  (You can skip that) I graduated from high school here. Also I graduated from Saint-Petersburg Marine Technical University with a high (high school or college?) degree. I studied in with the Faculty of Business Economics and Management and I qualified as an economic-manager. 

Now, I would like to tell you about my work experience. In the Last 5 years I worked for a large Russian company which has approximately 20 boutiques of world-wide brands watches and jewelry in diverse ("various" is probably a better word) regions of Russia.There are 10 shops in Moscow and 5 shops in Saint-Petersburg.

I had started my career as a sales assistant then I was promoted to store manager. I was working worked 3 years in a senior position. My main responsibilities were to support and encourage staff, to provide the highest level of customers’ service, to resolve all client problems and complaints, to achieve personal and store sales goals, to develop lasting client relationships and, of course, to provide staff supervision and guidance. I dealt with a lot of different kinds of people and I understood (learned) a lot about human’s behavior. It was a great experience for me. 

Finally (Recently), I quit my job and I had some reason to make this decision for a few reasons. My opinion is if you work too much in one place, it gets bad for your carrier career and your professional skills. You have every moment of life you have to learn something new and if your job becomes routine all the time you have to (should) change the place.

###

Well done!

1

Please guys help me with it! Thank you everyone! :)

My name is Maria. I’m 29 years old. I’ve been living in Saint-Petersburg for 15 years. Let me give you some information about my educational background: I graduated from high school here. Also I also graduated from Saint-Petersburg Marine Technical University with a high degree. I studied in the Faculty of Business Economics and Management and I qualified as an economic-manager.
Now, I would like to tell you about my work experience. For the last 5 years I worked for a large Russian company which has approximately 20 boutiques of world-wide brands of watches and jewelry in diverse regions of Russia. There are 10 shops in Moscow and 5 shops in Saint-Petersburg. I had started my career as a sales assistant then I was promoted to store manager.
I was working 3 years in a senior position. My main responsibilities were to support and encourage staff, to provide the highest level of customers’ service, to resolve all client problems and complaints, to achieve personal and store sales goals, to develop lasting client relationships and, of course, to provide staff supervision and guidance. I deal dealt with a lot of different kinds of people and I understood a lot about human’s human behavior. It was a great experience for me.
Finally, I quit my job and I had some reason to make this decision: my opinion is if you work too much in one place, it gets bad for your carrier career and your professional skills. Every moment of life you have to learn something new and if your job becomes routine all the time you have to change the place position.

Want to progress faster?

Join this learning community and try out free exercises!

Don’t miss out on the opportunity to learn a language from the comfort of your own home. Browse our selection of experienced language tutors and enroll in your first lesson now!

Start Learning Today