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My goals is to learn English Hi. My name is Novomir. I am a programmer and an entrepreneur from Russia. My profession and passion is a combination of programming, marketing and design. For example: creating landing pages, automatic sales funnels, scripts for writing API-interface, chat bots in Facebook and Telegram. And most of the interesting materials are written in English.. So now I'm learning English. Need a conversational practice :) I like California for its climate and Silicon Valley. New York is popular for its skyscrapers and the fact that it is the financial center of the world. I really want this fall to fly to New York for my birthday.

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My goals is to learn English

Hi. My name is Novomir.
I am a programmer and an entrepreneur from Russia.
My profession and passion is a combination of programming, marketing and design.
For example: creating landing pages, automatic sales funnels, scripts for writing API-interface, chat bots in Facebook and Telegram.
And most of the interesting materials are written in English..
So now I'm learning English. I need some conversational practice :)

I like California because of its climate and because of Silicon Valley.
New York is known for its skyscrapers and the fact that it is the financial center of the world.

I really want to fly to New York for my birthday this fall.
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Hi. My name is Novomir. I am a programmer and an entrepreneur from Russia. My profession and passion are a combination of programming, marketing and design. For example: creating landing pages, automatic sales funnels, scripts for writing API-interface, chat bots in Facebook and Telegram. And most of the interesting materials are written in English. So now I'm learning English. I need a some conversational practice :) I like California because of its climate and because of Silicon Valley. New York is known for its towers and the fact that it is the financial center of the world. I really want this fall to go to New York on my birthday this fall.

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Грамотно. Но есть нюансы: в США не принято говорить "небоскребы", говорят "башни". Например: "Trump tower".

My profession and passion are = They are (множественное число глагола to be).

По поводу Дня рождения, как вариант можно написать: "for my birthday celebration" (отметить ДР) или "on my birthday" (просто на этот день).

И "this fall" - это дополнение, которое нельзя воткнуть где угодно, оно должно быть в конце (допустимо в начале), его функция такая же как у слов "on my birthday", соответственно ставим вместе.

"Полететь" говорят на русском, на английском способ перемещения не так важен, если нет цели акцентировть на том, что будешь именно лететь.

Practice - неисчисляемое существительное, поэтому должно использоваться без артикля "a". Также, в предложении не было подлежащего. Желательно либо объединить с предыдущим предложением, где оно есть, либо указать заново.

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