A night that I'll never forget
When I was a child I was in my first girlfriend's house. I remembered my father says: You must come at home at 9 pm ; so I left and went to the bus station, but when I was walking to the bus station a thief appeared and he stole my money. I felt shame of borrow money, so I started to walk to my house. It was a very very long night because I had to walk about 32 kilometers (I think 20 miles).
I didn't be at time at home and my parents punished me (If you want to know it hahaha)
Search from various English teachers...
Corrections · 4
1
A night that I'll never forget
When I was a child, I was at my first girlfriend's house. I remembered that my father said: You must come at home at 9 pm; so I left and went to the bus station, but when I was walking to the bus station a thief appeared and he stole my money. I felt ashamed to borrow money, so I started to walk home. It was a very, very long night because I had to walk about 32 kilometers (20 miles, I think).I didn't arrive home on time and my parents punished me (If you wanted to know, hahaha)
0
A night that I'll never forget
When I was a child, I was in my first girlfriend's house. I remembered my father says said: You must come at home at be home by 9 pm ; so I left and went to the bus station, but when I was walking to the bus station a thief appeared and he stole my money. I felt shame of too ashamed to borrow money, so I started to walk to my house. It was a very very long night because I had to walk about 32 kilometres (I think that´s about 20 miles).I didn't be at time at home didn´t get back home on time and my parents punished me (If in case you wanted to know it hahaha)
Well done Andrés! You must have strong legs!
some advice.
1. Be careful with reported speech. " I am happy" "he said he was happy".
2. In English, you are ashamed of something as opposed to " having shame"
3. You don´t need to use "didn´t be " because you can simply put the past tense of "be" I wasn´t.
Overall it is a good piece of writing and it was easy to understand. If you wish to improve your English further, please feel free to contact me and we can talk about private classes. All the best, Matt
0
It sounds like your parents were strict. It must have taken hours to walk so far!
Writing short stories like this seems like good practice!
Want to progress faster?
Join this learning community and try out free exercises!
Don’t miss out on the opportunity to learn a language from the comfort of your own home. Browse our selection of experienced language tutors and enroll in your first lesson now!
Start Learning Today
