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A scary salvation Once day, I had to run, among the undergrowth, because an animal followed me, but the animal was like a shadow, without specific shape. It was of night, I was walking on a path, the sound of the night was relaxing, the moon’s light led my way, all was perfect, but then I hear a noise, a horrible noise, like a lament of woman. I quit to walk, with all my body rigid and my blood rising to my head. As I could, I turned my neck for watch the origin of the noise, but only I could see a pair of eyes, red eyes, among of a dark shape. Shape? That didn’t a shape, it was a burble of darkness It was to three maters of me for a second but in an instant it was not anymore. Then I felt a cold thing in my right shoulder, so I stared to run, with all my forces. The moon was not in the sky, and a watch the darkness closed my way, only I could watch to one meter in front me. A rock made me fall to floor. I watched my blood in my hands as if it had its own light. As I could, I got up and the mood watched me again, and the countryside was without rocks. When I come back to the path, the police were there with a man into the police car. He was a killer, and if I had been there, he would have killed me, he was waiting to his next victim. The thing saved my life.

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A scary salvation

Once day, I had to run among the undergrowth because an animal was hunting me, but the animal was like a shadow and formless.

It was night, and I was walking on the path. The sound of the night was relaxing, the moon’s light lit my way, all was perfect, but then I heard a noise, a horrible noise, like the lament of woman.


I stood still, with all my body rigid and my blood rising to my head. As much as I could, I turned my head to see the origin of the noise, but I could only see a pair of red eyes out of a dark shape.

Shape? It was less a shape than a bubble of darkness

It was three meters from me for a second but suddenly it was gone.

Then I felt a cold thing in my right shoulder, so I stared to run, with all my forces.

The moon was not in the sky, the darkness closed my way, and I could only see one meter before me.

A rock made me fall to the floor. I watched my blood on my hands as if it had its own light.

As far I could, I got up and the mood caught me again, and the countryside was without rocks.

When I come back to the path, the police were there with a man in the police car. He was a killer, and if I had been there, he would have killed me, he was waiting for his next victim.

The thing saved my life.

Very well written!

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