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Think about whether you had experiences with animals My first big travel was with my boyfriend to Yellowstone national park. I wanted to see geyser and fumarole, and I couldn’t decide between Canada or Iceland. It was hard for us to make up our mind, but at the end we travelled to Canada. As we were outdoors in nature and in spite of I never liked camping, we thought that could be funny camping near to lake, see the sunset, sleep under the start and over all get away from crows. The weather was hot then we camped with a small group of people. The first days we went hiking together, but after 4 days we went hiking alone. On the morning we walked along the shore of the lake. Ad midday we stopped to eat in a forest glade, crossed by a little river. We was eating meat sandwiches when we heart a strong noise. It was as someone shaking the floor. And suddenly a huge bear appeared in the glade. He stopped and he got on his hind legs, and roared. We stood up and slowly walked towards the forest, left out meals in the glade. The bear walked toward the meal and roared one more time. After he started to eat our meal and then we run to came back to the camp. Luckily the bear didn’t follow us. We was safe but with a tremendous fright. I have never returned to camp.

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Think about whether you had experiences with animals

My first big travel was with my boyfriend to Yellowstone national park. I wanted to see a geyser and a fumarole, and but I couldn’t decide between Canada or Iceland. It was hard for us to make up our mind, but at the end we traveled to Canada.
As we were outdoors in nature and in spite that I never liked camping, we thought that it would be funny camping near to the lake, see the sunset, sleep under the start stars (?) and overall get away from crows.

(When listing actions they should be all match the same tense; ex) camping, seeing, sleeping, getting or to camp, to see, to sleep, to get ) 


When the weather was hot, then we camped with a small group of people. The first days we went hiking together, but after 4 days we went hiking alone.
On the morning we walked along the shore of the lake. At midday we stopped to eat in a forest glade crossed by a little river. We was were eating meat sandwiches when we heart heard a strong noise. It was as if someone was shaking the floor. And Suddenly a huge bear appeared in the glade. He stopped and he got on his hind legs, and roared.
We stood up and slowly walked towards the forest, and left our meals in the glade. The bear walked toward the meal and roared one more time. After he started to eat our meal and then we run to came back we ran back to the camp. Luckily the bear didn’t follow us. We was were safe but with a tremendous fright. I have never returned to camp camped again.

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There were mostly only minor errors.

But nice story :)

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