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BEAUTY Most people say that Beauty is only skin-deep. As I see it, It should be that way but the true is that everybody is worried about his body image and makes an idea about other people because of their phisicall features, clothes and manners. This is not a bad thing by itself, if it helps you to find extra information. But it can´t be a motive to deny a person a friendship or less important, a small talk. We shouldn´t prejudge others, is what I mean. For instance, you can meet an overweight person and think that he/she is lazy and that is going on unhealthy diet but on the contrary, he/she could have a big health problem or a desease. Moving now on to people who looks always perfect, I´m convinced that they aren´t. What´s more, I think that they have a lot of flaws and lack of confindent, and that´s the reason why they need the approval of unknown people, on social media for example. That´s all I have to say about Beauty in the whole. Let´s talk about this issue in the environment (entrorno) I live, friends, family, workmates and me myself. From my point of view, we all are concerned about body image but not in an extreme way. We like to wear well or at least properly to each situation, act our age or even a bit younger, and I should say that here is quite important to keep fit, more than skinny. My fiends and I, we don´t photoshop any picture but we like to look nice, obviously. We all are very different phisically but I would say that we are similar in our behaviours and we have the same outlooks of life. When we were younger we used to worry about some phisicall defects but nothing serious. Only one of us thought seriously about going under cosmetic surgery on her nose. I suppose that growing up hearing constantly other children laughing at you has to be very hard and deppresing. Luckily, as the time goes by, we learn to live with our flaws and we give them the importance that they only have. Otherwise, life would be insupportable. If I had to summarise this composition I would say that body image is only important as an extra information, that we need to meet people by talking to them, by knowing what they have experienced in their lives, and then, only then, we can make an idea about their personalities. Meanwhile, we should have our mouths closed, because Beauty doesn´t mean anythin.

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BEAUTY (continued... last two paragraphs)


I suppose that growing up hearing other children constantly laughing at you has to be very hard and  depressing Luckily, as the time goes by, we learn to live with our flaws and we give them the importance that they only have (which is.....?). Otherwise, life would be insupportable.(too strong a word -- miserable perhaps)

If I had to summarise this composition I would say that body image Appearance should not be the only/sole criterion for judging a person.  is only important as an extra information, that we need to meet people by talking to them, by knowing what they have experienced in their lives, and then, only then, we can make an idea about their personalities.
Meanwhile, we should keep our minds open and our criticism to ourselves have our mouths closed, because Beauty doesn´t mean anythin.
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I think it was very brave to write and post such a long composition. Congratulations!
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Oh hh thankyou Next time it will be shorter!!! This is the first time that I write such a long composition
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Italki limits the space you have to correct. I ran out of space before I was finished correcting your essay. If you are writing a long essay, it is better to do TWO entries, (e.g., Beauty Part I, and Beauty Part 2).
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BEAUTY

Most people say that Beauty is only skin-deep.
As I see it, It should be that way (better: that would be ideal) but the truth is that most people are worried about their  body image and make  get an idea (better: make assumptions) about other people because of their physical features, clothes and manners.
     This is not a bad thing by itself,(better: in and of itself), but if it helps you to find extra information. But a person's appearance (or "the way a person looks") shouldn't be a reason to deny a person  friendship or less mportant, even a short conversation talk. We shouldn´t prejudge others, is what I mean.  
    For instance, you can meet an overweight person and think that he/she is lazy and eats an unhealthy diet (or: eats poorly) but in fact, he/she could have a big health problem or a disease.
     I´m convinced that  people who always look perfect are not really (perfect).  What´s more, I think that they have a lot of flaws and lack of confidence, and that´s the reason why they need the approval of unknown people, on social media for example.
That´s all I have to say about Beauty in the whole. 
Let´s talk about this issue in the environment (entrorno) I live, friends, family, workmates and me myself.
From my point of view,
Where I live, we all are concerned about body image but not in an extreme way. We like to wear good clothes or at least clothes proper  to each situation, clothes that reflect our age or make us seemeven a bit younger.,  I should say that here it is quite important to keep fit, more important than being slim. skinny.

My friends and I like to look nice but we don´t (or wouldn't) Photoshop any pictures of ourselves. We all are very different physically but I would say that we are similar in our behaviours and we have the same outlooks on life. When we were younger, we used to worry about some physical defects (better: imperfections) but nothing serious.(unclear what was serious, but we didn't think seriously about this, or we didn't think seriously about doing something about these "flaws")  Only one of us thought seriously about having cosmetic surgery on her nose.
       


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