just polishing up a bit :)

Dream

Tonight , I went tosee thejuniorclasswoman's class woman's performance, that was terrific. I have learned a little violin, butI didn't persist on in learning it (/persist in doing things, continue in doing things - maybe you are thinking of "insist on", as you used below, but that is something different).It is to be regretted (/It is regretful... /I regret...) that I gave it up. Everyone should insist on pursuing (or, following) her/his (his/her, in this order, is more common) dream, but I gaveitup.These days, I've been thinking about what to do. I have gradually gave given up ondoing things that is are meaningless. If I had insisted on pursuing my dream,I think itwould be much better now.

If there'sare any inappropriate words, please correct me!

Thanks in advance!

Some times you forget a space after a comma, but italki wouldn't let me highlight a space.

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Dream

Tonight , I went to see the  junior class woman's performance, that was terrific. I have learned a little violin, but I didn't persist in learning it.  I regret that I gave it up. Everyone should insist on pursuing his/her dream, but I gave it up.These days, I've been thinking about what to do. I have gradually given up on doing things that are meaningless. If I had insisted on pursuing my dream, I think it would be much better now.

If there are any inappropriate words, please correct me!

Dream

Tonight , I went to to see the lower junior classwoman's performance,very wonderful that was terrific. I have learned a little violin,but not persist in learning now I didn't persist on learning it. Maybe I regret to give up. It is to be regretted that I gave it up. Everyone should insist on her/his dream, but I gave it up.These days, I've been thinking about what to do, I have gradually gave up on some things just to do some meaningless doing things that is meaningless. If I had insisted on my dream, I think it would be much better now .

If there's any inappropriate words, please correct me!

Thanks in advance!