first practice!
sorry, but i can't well writing in english, then i want to learn
if you'r take care of me, thank you.
my goal is writing about programming, so i'm often talk to that.
of course, now i will write to diary or introduce me.
well...let's start!
first, i...like to programming. i have been studying since collage so i have been five year.
until now, i have been learned to C, C++, data structure, algorithm and TCP/IP...etc.
i want to be server programmer, but i have been one year. so i want to more study about server programming.
second, i like to idolmaster. www
well, i don't know talk about that, but really I like that.
if you like that too, please answer for me.
I'm hope to talk to idolmaster. i have not friends who like that at around.
please answer me! i will waiting!
third. i'm korean, so...i'm a soldier now.
i'm been a soldier for 20 months, then i'm fired after one month.
very very happy! soon i'm free! wwwwww
so...finish!
see you aging!
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First Practice!
Sorry, but I can't write well in English. However, I want to learn.If you take care of me, thank you. (More natural would be: "If you help me, thank you" or even better, "If you help me, I appreciate it")
My goal is writing about programming, so I will often talk about that.
Of course, now I will write a diary entry to introduce me.
Well...let's start!
First, I like to program. I have been studying since college, so I have been for five years.
Until now, I have learned about C, C++, data structure, algorithm and TCP/IP...etc.
I want to be a server programmer, but I have been one year (are you currently a server programmer - "I want to be a server programmer, but I have only been one for one year" , or what do you mean by "I have been one year"?). So I want to study more about server programming.
Second, I like to play idolmaster. www
Well, I don't talk about it, but really I like it.
If you like it too, please message me.
I hope to talk about idolmaster. I have no friends around who like it.
Please answer me! I will be waiting!
Third. I'm Korean, so...I'm a soldier now.
I've been a soldier for 20 months, then I'm done after one month. ("Fired" means let go dishonorably")
very very happy! soon I'm free! wwwwww
So...finished!
See you later!
Good job! One suggestion - watch capitalization (I fixed it in my edits). Otherwise, very good :)
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