A Christmas Tale part1
24 December 1978
The air was raging and the cold became colder, while my father came into our house bringing with him some chumps for the fireside.
“It is going to snow” he said.
We sat for a while and discussed the next day tasks, as we were waiting kin from the city to visit us. It would have been Christmas and my mother wanted to be all ide-al.
After two hours the sky darkened, the wind stopped to yelling and the first snow-flakes became to fall and until the time, we went for sleeping, there was a plenty of snow outside overlay the trees and the yard.
“Let’s get sleep.” said my mom.
But I had no intention to sleep. I went in my room, took my blanket, sat and I started to stare at the snow from my frozen and blurry window. I could see all the white field ·it was smooth and silent.
Around midnight a yellow glow occurred far away from my home. I thought it would be a man holding a lantern, while he was going to his home, someone who had been delayed by the snow. I continued to watch the light and minutes later it started to get closer to my home, while a figure of a man begun to shape. Definitely he has lost his way I thought.
The man was walking and now it seemed that he was heading to our house. I feared and I thought to go and wake up my father, but I stood still and keep watching the man, while steadily he was walking to our home. When he reached in a closer dis-tance I could discern the stranger. He was not wearing heavy clothes but a strange purple tunic with gold details around it.
He must be crazy for sure, he is going to freeze I thought.
The stranger man walked more steps and reached our yard, he opened the outdoor and came into. At that moment I frightened. Who was that stranger with the weird apparel?
Now, I could clearly distinguish that he was a man with a beard and wearing a hat around his head. At that time, I was ready to run and woke up my parents, when the man raised his head turn into my window and he stared at me. My heart went to broke in thousands of pieces from the fear, but a moment later the man crumpled in the snow and stayed incumbent on the ground as he was dead.
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A Christmas Tale part1
24 December 1978The wind was raging and the air became colder, while my father came into our house bringing with him some logs for the fireplace
“It is going to snow,” he said.
We sat for a while and discussed the next day's tasks, as we waited for relatives from the city to visit us. It was almost Christmas and my mother wanted everything be all ideal. (better: wanted everything to be perfect).
After two hours the sky darkened, the wind stopped howling and the first snow-flakes began to fall. By bed time, and until the time, we went for sleeping, there was plenty of snow outside on the trees and in the yard.
“Let’s get some sleep.” said my mom.
But I had no intention of sleeping. I went in my room, took my blanket, sat and I started to stare at the snow from my frozen and blurry window. I could see all the whole white field ·it was smooth and silent.
Around midnight, I saw a yellow glow occurred far away from my home (better; I saw a yellow glow in the distance). I thought it was perhaps a man holding a lantern going to his home, someone who had been delayed by the snow. I continued to watch the light and minutes later, it started to get closer to my home, while a figure of a man began to take shape (better: I could make out the shape of a man"). "He has definitely lost his way," I thought.
The man was walking and now it seemed that he was heading to our house. I feared was scared and I thought to go and wake up my father, but I stood still and kept watching the man, while he was steadily walking to our home. When he got closer, I could discern the stranger a little better. He was not wearing heavy clothes but a strange purple tunic with gold details around it.
"He must be crazy. For sure, he is going to freeze, " I thought.
When the stranger reached our yard, he opened the gate? and came into (into the yard?). At that moment I was quite frightened. Who was that stranger with the weird apparel?
Now, I could clearly distinguish that he was a man with a beard and (wearing) a hat around his head (?better: a bearded man wearing a hat). At that time, I was ready to run and wake up my parents when the man raised his eyes up to my window and he stared at me. My heart went to broke into thousands of pieces from the fear. A moment later, the man crumpled to the snow and lay on the ground as if he were dead.
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