Survive without smartphone
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Imagine you had live for a week without a technological device you use
in your daily file. Choose a device and make notes about what the
experience might be like. Write an article about it.
Survive without smartphone
How would you feel if you had to live without using your smartphone? I'm a passionate girl of technology. However, I decide saved my phone in a box and not use it for a one week.
The first thing I usually do in the mornings is to check the time and listen to music to start my day motivated but, in this occasion, I woke up and went to run to the park near to my house. I realized that had time to do exercise instead of spend a lot of time checking social networks.
Then, I know that the idea wasn't terrible. In fact, I remember that I was looking for a cafeteria. Inevitably, I asked the location to stranger people, I was keeping touch with humans and this was a new experience because I'm not a sociable girl.
Afterwards, I missed my family so I called them by a public telephone and expressed my feelings to them and no through a text message like before. For me, it was a emotived moment.
All in all, I would tell you more experiences but, finally I had noted that can survive without a smartphone and do things benefits like dedicated time for me and like keep in contact with real people.
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Wonderful work! I understand your message completely. I revised your essay to sound more natural:
"Survival without a smartphone
How would you feel if you had to live without using your smartphone for a long period of time? Personally, I use my smartphone every day. For the sake of experimentation, I decided to put my phone in a box and not use it for one week.
The first thing I usually do in the morning is check the time. Then, I listen to music to start my day off with a little motivation. But on this particular morning, I went for a run to the park near my house instead. After that run, I realized that I could save a lot of time by not checking social network sites on my phone. It occurred to me that putting the phone aside for a while wasn't such a terrible idea.
Later that day, I was looking for a cafeteria. Instead of using Google maps, I ended up asking strangers where the cafeteria was. By reaching out to new people, I was keeping in touch with my neighbors, and this too was a new experience for me. Perhaps this is because I'm not a sociable girl.
Afterwards, I missed my family, so I called them on a public telephone. I expressed my feelings to them with my voice, rather than through a text message. Since I am so reliant on text messaging for communication, hearing my mother's voice on the other end of the line was an emotional moment for me.
I would tell you more experiences, but I feel like the message is clear enough for me now: I can survive without a smartphone. I can do beneficial things instead, like keeping in contact with real people. If I can do it for one week, perhaps we all can."
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Survive without smartphone
Could somebody help me to review this article, please?Imagine you had to live for a week without a technological device you use
in your daily file. Choose a device and make notes about what the
experience might be like. Write an article about it.
Survive without smartphone
How would you feel if you had to live without using your smartphone? I'm a passionate girl of technology. However, I decided to save saved my phone in a box and not use it for a one week.
The first thing I usually do in the mornings is to check the time and listen to music to start my day motivated, but, in this occasion, however this time, I woke up and went to run to the park near to my house. I realized that had time to do exercise instead of spending a lot of time checking social networks.
Then, I know that the idea wasn't terrible. In fact, I remember that I was looking for a cafeteria. Inevitably, I asked the location to stranger people, I was keeping touch with humans and this was a new experience because I'm not a sociable girl.
Afterwards, I missed my family, so I called them byusing a public telephone and expressed my feelings to them, and not through a text message like before. For me, it was a emotived moment. Speaking to them rather than texting as before was surprisingly an emotional moment.
All in all, I could tell you more experiences, but finally basically, I have discovered that I I had noted that can survive without a smartphone and still do things that benefit me, such as dedicated time for me, as well as staying in connected to people in a more personal way. benefits like dedicated time for me and like keep in contact with real people.
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Survive without smartphone
Could somebody help me review this article, please?Imagine you had lived for a week without a technological device you use
in your daily file. Choose a device and make notes about what the
experience might be like. Write an article about it.
Survive without smartphone
How would you feel if you had to live without using your smartphone? I'm a passionate girl of technology. However, I decided to save my phone in a box and not to use it for one week.
The first thing I usually do in the mornings is to check the time and to listen to music to start my day motivated but, in this occasion, I woke up and went to run to the park near my house. I realized that had time to do exercise instead of spending a lot of time checking social networks.
Then, I know that the idea wasn't terrible. In fact, I remember that I was looking for a cafeteria. Inevitably, I asked strangers about the location, I was keeping in touch with humans and this was a new experience because I'm not a sociable girl.
Afterwards, I missed my family so I called them by a public telephone and expressed my feelings to them and not through a text message like before. For me, it was an emotive moment.
All in all, I would tell you more experiences but, finally I had noted that I can survive without a smartphone and do useful things like dedicating time for me and like keeping in contact with real people.
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