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travel experience Hello Everyone, Today I am writing about my travelling experience. I and my family been to Newyork last month. There we stayed in a Hotel for Two days. We live in Houston and there are five members in my family so we decided to go by road so that we all can enjoy together while travelling. So we depart on October 20th. Newyork is a day away from Houston. Total distance I didn't remember exactly but it took us one and a half day because we took a halt at night. After arrived to Newyork the first place we went to was The Statue of Liberty. Everyone know about it after-all it is one of the seven wonders of world. Statue of liberty is situated on liberty Island so you have to go through Statue Cruise. We reached there within 15 mins by cruise. It was a sunny day even than windy because of sea. There were a lot crowd came to see the Statue from all over the world. It was not allowed to go on the top of the tourch that time. She is really beautiful and she has been gifted to United States by France as a symbol of Independence. she is been made by the same man who built Eiffel tower in Paris. After seeing all things on liberty Island we back to cruise and she took us to National Museum of Immigration on Ellis Island. It was the place for 12 million immigrants. After the liberty Island we went to Madame Tussauds' Museum. and at night after dinner at some vegetarian restaurant we get tired and back to Hotel again. It is only one day of vacation what we did other day will tell tomorrow. till then, take care!

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Hello Everyone,
Today I am writing about my travelling experience. My family and I went to New York last month. There we stayed in a Hotel for Two days. We live in Houston and there are five members in my family so we decided to go by road so that we could all enjoy the trip together while travelling. So we departed (left is a better word) on October 20th. New York is a day away from Houston. Total distance I didn't remember exactly but it took us one and a half days because we took a halt at night. After we arrived to New York the first place we went to was The Statue of Liberty. Everyone knows about it. After-all it is one of the seven wonders of world. The Statue of liberty is situated on liberty Island so you have to go through Statue Cruise. We reached there within 15 mins by cruise. It was a sunny day, but windy because of sea. There was a big crowd that had come to see the Statue from all over the world. We were not allowed to go on the top of the torch that time. She is really beautiful and she has been gifted to United States by France as a symbol of Independence. she was made by the same man who built the Eiffel tower in Paris. After seeing all things on liberty Island we got back on cruise which took us to National Museum of Immigration on Ellis Island. It was the place for 12 million immigrants. After the liberty Island we went to Madame Tussauds' Museum. and at night after dinner we went to some vegetarian restaurant and we got tired and went back to the Hotel again. This is only one day of vacation. what we did the other day I will tell tomorrow.
till then, take care!

Hey Pooja! Here's some suggestions:

The first mistake was just word order. List other people before yourself. The green highlights are all just verb conjugation or tense issues. Enjoy is one of those words where you have to have something after it. In other words, you have to enjoy something, you can't just enjoy (unless its a command or something). "Days" is technically plural because its more than one. Don't forget the subject or the article. That mistake came up a couple times. The rest were all minor errors just to make your language a little more clear. Overall it was great! Keep it up!

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