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Could you correct me if I'm wrong ! Hello there! Nice to meet you!

I'm new here and this essay is my first one.

Let me introduce me.

I'm from Osaka Japan .l'm 20 years old.

I'm University student but now I'm on a leave of absence to find my aim. I usually work as campaign and promotional model.

I love Hawaii so l used to live on Maui.There was one of the most amazing place!!!!

I'm really really dog person.l have a Dachshund.Everyday l play with him.

What else sould I write??

Anyway I need your comments.Thank you for reading my essay!

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Could you correct me if I'm wrong?

Hello there! Nice to meet you!

I'm new here and this essay is my first one.

Let me introduce myself.

I'm from Osaka Japan .l'm 20 years old.

I'm a University student but at the moment I'm on a leave of absence to find my aim in life. I usually work as a campaign and promotional model.

I love Hawaii so l used to live on Maui. It was one of the most amazing places!!!!

I'm really really a dog person. l have a Dachshund. Every day l play with him.

What else should I write??

Anyway I need your comments.Thank you for reading my essay!

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Could you correct me if I'm wrong?

Hello there! Nice to meet you!

I'm new here and this essay is my first one.

Let me introduce myself.

I'm from Osaka, Japan. l'm 20 years old.

I'm a university student, but now I'm on a leave of absence to find what I want to do in life. I usually work as a campaign and promotional model.

I love Hawaii so l used to live on Maui. It was the most amazing place!!!!

I'm really really a dog person.l have a Dachshund. Every day l play with him.

What else should I write??

Anyway I need your comments.Thank you for reading my essay!

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Could you correct me if I'm wrong !


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Hello there! Nice to meet you!

大丈夫です

I'm new here and this essay is my first one.

I'm new here and this is my first notebook entry.

Let me introduce me.

Let me introduce myself.

I'm from Osaka Japan .l'm 20 years old.

My name is Honoka and I'm from Osaka. I am currently 20 years old.

I'm University student but now I'm on a leave of absence to find my aim. I usually work as campaign and promotional model.

I'm a university student, but I'm currently on a leave of absence to figure out my plans in life. I am also working as a campaign and promotional model.

I love Hawaii so l used to live on Maui.There was one of the most amazing place!!!!

I used to live in Maui, Hawaii. I love it there and it's one of the most amazing places I've been to.

I'm really really dog person.l have a Dachshund.Everyday l play with him.

I'm really a dog person and I have a dachshund. I play with him every day.

What else sould I write??

What else should I write about?

Anyway I need your comments.Thank you for reading my essay!

I appreciate your comments, and thank you for reading my essay!

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Hi, Honoka! My name's Erin and I'm new to italki, too! I hope you have a great time learning English. I'm so jealous that you used to live in Hawaii! I visited Hawaii twice, and both times I thought it was just beautiful. What is your dog's name?

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