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Letter to Carol Dear Carol, How are things in the new city? I'm well and very happy at the moment. I'am working in a psychiatric and neurological clinic. The clinic is very organized and the other professional are very kind and educated. They help me when I have any question. I also study English on Tuesday, because I really need learn English to be able to travel. I want to travel soon to New Zealand. Have you been there? They say it's incredible. There are many beautiful landscapes. Maybe, I will stay two weeks, but I still have nothing scheduled. Last year, I didn't travel and this year I want to travel on may vacation. A short time ago, I began to take dabce classes. I have never done this before! I have had fun and relax! But how is your family? Have you adapted to the new city? How are you at work? Do you know what you are going to do on vacation? Please write soon. Isabelle

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Letter to Carol

Dear Carol,

How are things in the new city?

I'm well and very happy at the moment. I'am  I'm working in a psychiatric and neurological clinic. The clinic is very organized and the other professionals are very kind and educated. They help me when I have any question.

I also study am studying  English on Tuesdays, because I really need to   learn English to be able to travel. I want to travel soon to New Zealand. Have you been there? They say it's incredible. There are many beautiful landscapes. THe landscape is supposed to be very beautiful.  Maybe, I will stay (better: I'm thinking of staying)  two weeks, but I still have nothing scheduled. Last year, I didn't travel (at all) and this year I want to travel on my vacation.

A short time ago, I began to take dance classes (better: dance lessons OR go to dance classes). I had never done this before! I have had am having fun and relaxing!

But how is your family? Have you adapted to the new city? How are you at is work? Do you know what you are going to do on vacation?

Please write soon.

Isabelle

Notes: 

Temporary time in the present (often with the word "this")-- present continuous

They live in my building, but right now they are staying with friends in Manhattan while work is being done on their apartment.
This semester, I'm taking Spanish II.

landscape -- is a noncount noun, so you can't use the word 'many'

mixed tenses

A short time ago, I began to take dance classes.(PAST)  I had never done this before! (PAST PERFECT, which is something that happened in the past BEFORE another action in the past). I have had am having fun and relaxing!  (present continuous because it is something you are doing now (still taking dance lessons)

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Letter to Carol

Dear Carol,

How are things in the new city?

I'm well and very happy at the moment. I am working in a psychiatric and neurological clinic. The clinic is very organized and the other professionals are very kind and educated. They help me when I have any questions.

I also study English (on Tuesdays / every Tuesday), because I really need learn English to be able to travel. I want to travel to New Zealand (soon)*. Have you been there? They say it's incredible. There are many beautiful landscapes. Maybe, I will stay for two weeks, but I still have nothing scheduled. Last year, I didn't travel and this year I want to travel during the May vacation.

Recently, I began to take dance classes. I have never done this before! It is fun and relaxing!

But how is your family? Have you adapted to the new city? How are you at work? Do you know what you are going to do on vacation?

Please write soon.


Isabelle

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Dear Carol, how are things in the new city? I'm well and very happy at the moment. I'm working in a psychiatric and neurological clinic. The clinic is very organized and the other professionals are very kind and educated. They help me when I have any questions. I also study English on Tuesdays, because I really need learn English to be able to travel. I want to travel soon to New Zealand soon. Have you been there? They say it's incredible. There are many beautiful landscapes. Maybe, I will I might stay there for two a couple weeks, but I still have nothing don't have anything scheduled. Last year I didn't travel and this year I want to travel on my vacation. A short time ago I began to started takeing dance classes. I have never done this before! I've had fun and have been able to relax! But how is your family? Have you adapted to the new city? How are you at is work? Do you know what you are going to do on vacation? Please write soon. Isabelle

I tried to make corrections that still kept the original feeling of your writing but that sounded a bit more natural. You used a few too many commas (in my opinion) so I took out some of those as well. Keep up the good work!

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I forgot to comment about the word "educated" in your sentence "The clinic is very organized and the other professionals are very kind and educated". While the word is perfectly correct, it is not something that someone would say ("the professionals are educated). Professionals are, by definition, educated. In your sentence, I would say one of the following: The professionals seem to know a lot The professionals seem to know their jobs very well The professionals are very helpful Also, I would not use the word "professionals" -- I would use the word "staff" (3rd person singular) The staff is kind and helpful. The staff has been wonderful.

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