Could you do me a favour and help me correct my writing? Thank you!

As a book-loving student who often spends a lot of time on reading, I am pretty obliged for the services and convenience you have offered. To contribute to further promoting the service quality of the library, I would like to make some suggestions.
First and foremost, I think, computers and advanced technology ought to be introduced to the library to facilitate retrieving information and borrowing books. Additionally, it would be better if the library could provide some recently published books, so that students can easily gain new information and ideas. Last but not least, adding more tables and chairs would allow more students to learn and read in the library.
I would be grateful if you considered my suggestions.

Yours sincerely,
Li Ming

To whom it may concern:

As a student who loves books and reads often, I am grateful for the services and convenience you have offered. To help further improve the library's services, I would like to offer some suggestions.

First and foremost, I believe computers and advanced technology ought to be added to the library to make it easier to retrieve information and borrow books. Additionally, it would be better if the library provided some recently published books so students could easily acquire new information and ideas. Last, but not least, adding more tables and chairs would allow more students to study and read in the library.

I would be grateful if you would consider my proposals.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming