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In my freshman year, I joined Enactus, one of the three biggest international non-governmental organizations for university students, for the purpose of helping other people improve their lives and making little changes for the community. In the three years in Enactus, my teammates and I have discovered the problems through daily life and the Internet, put forward feasible solutions after brainstorming and cogitating, and put it into practice. In the past three years, we helped sugarcane growers improve the crop utilization and broadened the online sales channels, we protected Chinese traditional handicrafts by shooting a documentary, holding online design contest and recruiting volunteers, we built an online public service project--volunteer docking platform, and we recycled abandoned bicycles on campus and turned them into public ones.
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Please help me to make it more well -written. Thanks a lot !
In my freshman year, I joined Enactus, which is one of the three biggest international non-governmental organizations for university students whose sole
In the three years in Enactus, my teammates and I have discovered the problems through daily life and the Internet, put forward feasible solutions after brainstorming and cogitating ( they most or less describe the same mental activity.), and put it into practice.
> In the three years in Enactus, my teammates and I have found out more about the everyday problems that some people are facing, problems that we are aware of from our own experience as well as those that we know of from the Internet, after which we would brainstormed these issues so that we could come out with the best possible feasible solutions we could think of, before implementing them .
In the past three years, we had helped sugarcane growers improved on their crop utilization and broadened their online sales channels; we had highlighted the need to protect Chinese traditional handicraft industry by shooting a documentary about them, as well as holding online design contests to show our support and recruiting more volunteers to help out; we had launched an online public service project--volunteer docking platform,?? ; and we had also repaired old abandoned bicycles found on campus and turned them over to the public to use.
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