ENCOURAGE YOUNG PEOPLE TO EAT MORE HEALTHLY
In the last years, recent survays have shown us that more than a 60 per cent of the young people of our country is suffering from overwheight with the consequences that this fact has for the health of these bodys which are still growing up.
Despite of these catastrophic results, the children haven´t changed their habits. So in this essay I will try to offer some possible solutions to implement the healthy food in their daily menus.
Firstly, We must seriously think about the reason because of which If they know that the fast food, additives and preservaties are consumed if they know that is dangerous. The answer is easy: the children do what they see at home. In Germany the young people are really enthusiastic of the “crudités” because since they are babys they parents have offered them as a very tasteful food in the birthday´s parties. The humans, like the animals, repeat the behaviour of their communities, so in order to improve the feeding habits of their children, the parents should cook more vegetable and fruits.
Secondly, in my opinion, I find that the schoolar children know that some food is not good, for example an hamburger or a pizza, but they don´t really know the possible consecuences of their consume. The diabetes, circulatory problems, allergies or cancer are only some of them. The teacher, who are qualified professionals to teach, are the idoneous people to open htem the eyes and correct the mistakes of the previous generations.
In sum, the education from parents and docents is the key to encouraging young people to rediscover the healthy food.
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"In the last years, recent survays have shown us that more than a 60 per cent of the young people of our country is suffering from overwheight..."
In the last (quantifier) years,
In the last 10 years,
In the last few years,
In the last several years,
In the last several years, recent surveys have shown that more than...
You don't need "us" . It's understood.
In the last several years, recent surveys have shown that more than 60 per cent of young people in our country...
You don't need "the" - it's understood that you are talking about every young person in our country.
Since you are talking about the location of the young people you want to use "in".
"Young people in our country" is that singular or plural?
Plural right, we're talking about ALL the young people in your country.
In the last several years, recent surveys have shown that more than 60 per cent of young people in our country are suffering...
Since "young people in our country" is plural than we want to change "is" to "are".
In the last several years, recent surveys have shown that more than 60 per cent of young people in our country are suffering from (being overweight | obesity).
In the last several years, recent surveys have shown that more than 60 per cent of young people in our country are suffering from being overweight.
That's a good sentence. The next piece I would start a new sentence. It's much easier to write simple sentences. And it's much easier to read and understand simple sentences.
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