An article : ("Smartphones _ A great invention ?")
Many people today don’t just have a mobile phone, they have a smartphone like an iPhone or a blackberry . but is it a great invention ? I think there are both advantages and disadvantages .
The first advantage is that we can communicate with people easily and this the basic reason smartphone was built for and it is easy to find help in an emergency situations . Secondly , the multiple uses of smartphone like taking photos by using the camera and listening to music . Thirdly , using the internet so we can get what happen around the world.
But on the other hand , there are also disadvantages .
For examples , wasting time because the huge amount of applications and games which we can use it .Also Phones can be addictive and spending too much time on them can make you socially isolated from the real world .
In conclusion ,as we say every thing is double-edged sword
It depends on you to choose how you will use your smartphone .
If you Set limits and manage your time you will be fine.
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An article : ("Smartphones _ :A great invention ?") (typically we would use a : or -, but this is not really that important...)
Many people today don’t just have a mobile phone, they have a smartphone like an iPhone or a blackberry. . bBut is it a great invention? I think there are both advantages and disadvantages .The first advantage is that we can communicate with people easily and this the basic reason the smartphone was built. for and i It is easy to find help in an emergency situations . Secondly , The second advantage is the multiple uses of for smartphone like taking photos by using the camera and or listening to music . Thirdly, using we can access the internet on our smartphones so that we can get know what is happening around the world.
But On the other hand, there are also disadvantages.
For examples, we waste ing time because of the huge amount of applications and games which we can access use it .Also Phones can be addictive and spending too much time on them can make you socially isolated from the real world .
In conclusion, as we say, everything is double-edged sword
It depends on you to choose how you will use your smartphone .
If you set limits and manage your time, you will be fine.
Notes: the following are not complete sentences:
"Secondly, the multiple uses of smartphone like taking photos by using the camera or listening to music"
"Thirdly, using the internet so we can get what happen around the world"
This is why I changed them. They could have also been written as:
"Secondly, the multiple uses of smartphone like taking photos or listening to music is considered an advantage or a convenience by many people"
"Thirdly, smartphones offer internet access so that we know what is happening around the world"
Nice job overall!
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