Self introduction
I'm a student of Waseda university in Tokyo. I major on architecture and I'm interested in structure division. I've had a interest of only designing building forms before, but recently, I've been into designing forms in terms of structure. I think designing structure is so cool and it's very important in Japan. So I try to study on it so hard and I'll make safety and cool building in the future.
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Self introduction
I'm a student of Waseda University in Tokyo. I am majoring on in architecture and I'm interested in structure [1] division. I once had an interest of in only just [2] designing buildings forms before, but recently I've been gotten [3] into designing forms in terms of structure [4]. I think (that) designing structures is so cool and it's also very important in Japan. So, I try to study on it so hard as hard as I can and I'll I hope to make safety and cool, safe buildings in the future.1. I'm not sure if this should maybe be "structural division"? Or perhaps "the division of structures" or "the way that structures are divided"? I don't know the terminology of the field, so then I'm not even really sure what you're trying to convey - sorry!
2. I think that "only" is maybe okay here but I feel that "just" works better in this case, for some reason...
3. "Been into", to me, implies that you were into it but now you're not much like "was into".
4. I don't fully understand this part.
Only other thing I'll say is perhaps try to use "so" less and make more use of "very"; "really"; "extremely" and friends!
Hope that was at least somewhat helpful. D:
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