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(I would like to correct for many people.)
I went to the gym today. At first, I used a treadmill for thirty minutes . then I used some machines which to training with muscle . After, I used a strange machine which called AMT . It was very hard. I felt I was climbing mountains . Anyway, I am going to there every day.
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diary ＃5
(I would like to correct for many people.)I went to the gym today. At first, I used a treadmill for thirty minutes . Then, I used some machines which to training with with which to train muscles . After that, I used a strange machine which that is called AMT. It was very hard. I felt like I was climbing mountains. Anyway, I am going to there every day.
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This is a very creative writing submission and you describe the order of events very well. Good job! The most common issue is missing words. Also, the sentence "then I used some machines which to training with muscle" can be phrased as "Then, I used some machines which to training with with which to train muscles" or "Then, I used some machines which to training with which train muscles." There are some other ways to express the same idea, but the ones I suggested use "which", which seems to be what you would like to practice. -Best wishes, Shelley
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