Just Practice

Last night, I went for a walk. I found a friend and we spoke for quite some time, to my surprise he commented to me that he is in a contract marriage but his life brings happiness and sadness, he has a baby named Jordy, and they live in a rented house

I know that it is not wrong, but he said me "I want my own house" and after he said "be strong Adrian. I do not regret having my family, it is all for me but I took responsibility at a very young age" and he gave me tips too... He finished talking. I was silent, I hugged my friend, he thanked me, he needed to speak with someone.

I remembered that my girlfriend left me because I never had time to share with her. I just want to finish  university well. I aspire for a scholarship for being good student.

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Hello Adrian! Pretty good job here, you were able to narrate quite clearly. Let's just go over some points:

- Instead of yesterday night you can just say last night. Yesterday generally means during the daytime

- Be careful with some tenses and verbs

- Be careful with capitalizing subject I

Hope this helps!

Just Practice

Yesterday I went to walk in the night. I found a friend and we spoke quite some time. To my surprise, he commented to me that he has a contract marriage, but his life brings both happiness and sadness. He has a baby with the name Jordy, and they live in a rented house

I know that it is not wrong, but he told me, "I want to own a house," and after that he said "Be strong Adrian. I do not regret my family, it is all for me but I took responsibility at a very young age." He also gave me tips then finished talking. I was silent. I hugged my friend and he thanked me because he needed to speak with someone.

I remembered that my girlfriend left me because I never had time to share with her. I just want to finish the university successfully. I aspire to get a scholarship for being a good student.

Postdata: This story is not necessarily real.