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Describing a bar chart: Percentage of British people giving money to charity The bar chart shows the percentage of British people making donations in 1990 and 2010 with classification by age. A steady but significant rise can be seen in the percentage. An analysis of the data by age shows that older people give more money to charity in both of those years, but percentage drops off for people over 65. The maximum percents can be observed in 1990 when numbers for 36-50 age group were up to about 42% whilst minimum results of approximately 7% in 2010 were shown by 18-25 years old group. The minimum percent is for the youngest group, in 1990, around 17% of 18-25 year old people donated money, but this figure had fallen to 7% by 2010. There were also moderate decreases, of approximately 5-7 percentage points, for the 26-35 and 36-50 age groups (going down to about 24% and 35% respectively in 2010). However, percents for 51-65 and over 65 groups proved to have the higher level than the same groups in 1990, figures reached about 40% and 35% accordingly, about 3-5 percentage points higher than in 1990.

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Describing a bar chart: Percentage of British people giving money to charity

The bar chart shows the percentage of British people making donations in 1990 and 2010 with classification by age.

A steady but significant rise can be seen in the percentage. An analysis of the data by age shows that older people gave more money to charity in both of those years, but the percentage drops off for people over 65. The maximum percentages can be observed in 1990 when the figures/numbers for the 36-50 age group were up to about 42% whilst the minimum results of approximately 7% in 2010 were shown by 18-25 years old group.

The minimum percent is for the youngest group, in 1990, around 17% of 18-25 year old people donated money, but this figure had fallen to 7% by 2010. There were also moderate decreases, of approximately 5-7 percentage points, for the 26-35 and 36-50 age groups (going down to about 24% and 35% respectively in 2010).

However, percents for 51-65 and over 65 groups proved to have a higher level than the same groups in 1990, figures reached about 40% and 35% accordingly, about 3-5 percentage points higher than in 1990.

Hello Yulia,

You have given a fairly accurate description of the graph and used a variety of language although some points could be clearer. You could simply state in the summary (final para) - 'the percentage of people under the age of 50 donating declined by between 7 and 10 percent while the  figure for those over 50 increased by between 5 and 9 percent.'

Your word count is fine approx 185 words.

Best wishes


Bob

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