geting an intership but falling behind in the team project
Dear manager
I am very appreciated that you give me the chance as a trainee in your company this summer. I am writing to give my apology for the mistake i made in the team project.
Compared to other intern, this job doesn't match my educated background, which means i need to put more efforts on my work, but i am still fall behind. I want to know if i can change a department according to my skills and interests. Thank you for considering my request.
yours sincerely
Shuangling Li
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Getting an internship but falling behind on the team's project
Dear managerI am very appreciated happy that you gave me the chance as a to become trainee in for your company this summer. I am writing to give my (sincerest) apologies for the mistake(s?) that I made in the team project.
Compared to other interns, this job doesn't match my educated background is a bit above the education I've received, which means I need to put in more efforts on my work, but I am still falling behind. I want to know if I can change to a new/different department according better suited to my skills and interests. Thank you for considering I hope you will consider my request.
Yours sincerely
Shuangling Li
* The "sincerest" is not necessary but it makes your apology more deep. Think of it like the difference between "thank you" and "thank you very much."
* If you've only made one mistake, you just say mistake. If you've made several (I can't deduce this from your entry, it's up to you to decide which is correct) mistakes then you say mistakes.
* "doesn't match my educated background" is entirely wrong, it implies you've been well educated and that this job is either not what you were expecting or that you're "above" it (like "this job sucks, I'm too smart for it.") My correction makes it more appropriate and means that the job you have right now is a bit above your skill level, but not entirely impossible.
* Both "new" and "different" work, but if you want to be sure you can use "different."
* "Thank you for considering my request" isn't wrong but it implies they're definitely going to consider it which might come off as a little entitled. "I hope you will consider my request" asks of them to consider your request without putting any "pressure" on them, but because you're asking for it nicely and by extent implying they don't need to move you, they're likely going to be more nice and consider moving you to a more appropriate department.
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