The goose girl
Today I read a fale story, now I will retell it.
There is a beautiful princess who will become a bride. When she leaves , her mother, the queen, gives her many costly things. And a good fairy cuts off her a lock of hair to her, which has magic.
There still is a waiting-maid who is evil. She forces the meek and patient princess to be a maid when the princess lost her magic hair.
When they arrives at the prince's kingdom, the poor princess is asked to drive the geese on. Well thanks for the boy raising geese in that he wants to pull some princess's pure silver of hair out . And why?the princess makes his hat blowed by a wind with magic, then the boy must to run after his hat.
Oftentimes boy can't stand anymore, he goes to find the king and tells him.
The king askes the princess aside, and he knows everything.
So the bride marries to her bridegroom, the real waiting-maid has her punishment.
Story is over .
Why does the sad story happen?
I think maybe the bride is too meek. Sometimes people have to fight for their rights and their own things .
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The Goose Girl
Today I read a fairytale, and now I will share it.There was a beautiful princess who was to become a bride. When she was leaving, her mother, the queen, gave her many costly (precious) things, such as a lock of fairy's hair which had magic.
However there still was a waiting-maid who was evil. She forced the meek and patient princess to be a maid when the princess lost her magic lock of hair.
When they (who they? Geese?) arrived at the prince's kingdom, the poor princess was asked to drive the geese off. Well thanks to the boy raising geese, because he wanted to pull out some princess's pure silver hair. And why? This made his hat be blowed by a wind with magic and made him run after his hat. ***
Oftentimes**** boy can't stand anymore, he goes to find the king and tells him.
The king asked* the princess aside, and he learned everything.
So the bride married to her bridegroom, the real waiting-maid had her punishment.
Story is over .
Why does the sad story happen?
I think maybe the bride is too meek. Sometimes people have to fight for their rights and their own things .
This is very difficult to follow - try to read more and follow the english structure. Also perhaps try to write in more simple and ordered sentences. The story is confusing and reading it makes no sense. Even though I made corrections - I am afraid without full understanding of story they are useless. Good luck and don't give up.
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