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memoir (could you please help me to correct it?) I couldn’t fall asleep until my mother called me at about 0:00 a.m. immediately, she said, in a quavering voice: I received a letter yesterday, from which I was aware of what happened, there was an accident on your father and from now on we all couldn’t contact with him, also, I didn’t know when he would come back…. A sob caught in my throat,I kept silence for a long time and didn’t listen to what my mother had spoken completely. I threw my phone aside, covered my head with quilt and whimpered, spared no efforts to take control of my cries to avoid waking up my roommates. I felt as if I had fallen into a bottomless pit and couldn’t breathe, kept asking myself, how exactly did this happen? What should I do? Why did we have to bear this...It was as if it had been a century, I said to my mother: mom, I was fine, don’t worry. Then hung up the phone. Had lain awake all night.

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memoir (could you please help me to correct it?)

I couldn’t fall asleep until my mother called me at about midnight. Immediately, she said, in a quavering voice, "I received a letter yesterday, from which I was made aware of something that happened. There was an accident and from now on we all couldn't contact with your father.  Also, I don't know when he will come back." A sob caught in my throat.  I kept silent for a long time and didn’t listen to the rest of what my mother was saying. I threw my phone aside, covered my head with a quilt and whimpered, sparing no efforts to take control of my cries to avoid waking up my roommates. I felt as if I had fallen into a bottomless pit and couldn’t breathe, kept asking myself, how exactly did this happen? What should I do? Why did we have to bear this?.... It was as if it had been a century. I said to my mother: "mom, I am fine, don’t worry." Then I hung up the phone. I then lay awake all night.


I tried not to change the writing style too much and focused more on correction that style choice.  Hope this helps!

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