One memorable day with my friends
It was a perfect day.
at first we decided to meet each other new the Chitgar lake.
There is a man-made lake in the east of Tehran(the capital of Iran). and there are a lot of restaurants and coffee shops at beside of it. the weather is great specially in fall and spring. you can see many birds on the lake witch migrate to the north part of Iran in fall. and by the way there is a theme park near the lake too.
we met each other at about 2 p.m. we stay for my other friend about 30 minutes. then we find a pergola and played different games. after that we went to a coffee shop. I didn't order anything because I eat my lunch heavily. we took a rest and spoke about colleges exams and our teacher for about half past an hour and after that we decided to go to them park near the lake. actually I and most of my friends voted to roller coaster and tunnel fear. in fact roller coaster was amazing but tunnel fear was funny for most of us.One of my friend was scared from roller coaster very much we talked about her motions during the roller coaster. Her face went white during the game and her hand shook terribly. I was really scared when I saw that happens. so after the game we gave her some water with suger. then we went to a restaurant and we ordered sandwiches and hamburger.the food was great but its takes along time when we ordered the food until the waiter served it for us. after that I think it was about 6 oclock in the evening we went back home. one of the things that was terrible for me was the time that we were coming back to home. the traffic was terrible.
generally I can say it was memorable day for me I spent good times with my friends.....
It would be great if some one help to revise my essay.
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One memorable day with my friends
It was a perfect day.At first we decided to meet each other near the Chitgar Lake.
There is a man-made lake in the east(?) of Tehran (the capital of Iran). There are a lot of restaurants and coffee shops at beside of it. The weather is great, especially in the fall and spring. You can see many birds on the lake which migrate to the northern part of Iran in fall. By the way, there is a theme park near the lake too.
We met each other at about 2 p.m. We waited for my other friend for about 30 minutes. Then we found a pergola and played different games. After that we went to a coffee shop. I didn't order anything because I had eaten a heavy lunch. We took a rest and spoke about colleges exams and our teacher for about an hour and a half,. After that we decided to go to theme park near the lake. Actually I and most of my friends voted to ride the roller coaster and tunnel of fear. In fact the roller coaster was amazing, but the tunnel of fear was funny for most of us. One of my friend was very scared by the roller coaster. We talked about her emotions during the roller coaster ride. Her face went white during the ride and her hands shook terribly. I was really scared when I saw that happens, so after the ride we gave her some water with sugar. Then we went to a restaurant and we ordered sandwiches and hamburgers. The food was great, but it took a long time from when we ordered the food until the waiter served it to us. After that I think it was about 6 o'clock in the evening when we went back home. One of the things that was terrible for me was the time that we were returning home. The traffic was terrible.
In general, I can say it was a memorable day for me. I had good times with my friends.....
It would be great if some one help to revise my essay.
-You need to capitalize the first letter in a sentence.
-Isn't Chitgar in west Tehran?
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One memorable day with my friends
It was a perfect day.At first we decided to meet each other new at the new Chitgar lake.
There This is a man-made lake in/to the east of Tehran(the capital of Iran). and There are a lot of restaurants and coffee shops at beside of it.
The weather is great specially in fall and spring. You can see many birds on the lake witch which migrate to the north part of Iran in fall. And by the way there is a theme park near the lake too.
We met each other at about 2 p.m. We stay waited for my other friend for about 30 minutes. Then we find found a pergola and played different games.
After that we went to a coffee shop. I didn't order anything because I do eat my heavy lunch heavily. We took a had some rest and spoke about colleges exams and our teacher for about half past an hour and after that we decided to go to them the park near the lake.
Actually I and most of my friends voted to roller coaster and tunnel fear. In fact the roller coaster was amazing but the tunnel fear was funny for most of us.One of my friends was scared from by the roller coaster very much. We talked about her motions during the roller coaster.
Her face went white during the game and her hand shook terribly. I was really scared when I saw that happening. So after the game we gave her some water with suger sugar.
We then then we went to a restaurant and we ordered sandwiches and hamburger. The food was great but it took long to be served.
After that I think it was about 6 o'clock in the evening so we went back home.
One of the things that was terrible for me was the time that we were coming back to home. The traffic was terrible.
Generally I can say it was a memorable day for me I spent good times with my friends.....
It would be great if some one help to revise my essay.
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thank you.
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It was a nice memory. Good luck
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