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Reem alkamash Today I will talk about my skills: When I was younger I loved painting a lot and I participated in art exhibitions. When I grew up and completed my studies, I did not stop my love for painting and I was registered in the drawing department of an engineering institute.This brought me finally to the world of engineering and completed my studies and graduated from the Faculty of Civil Engineering.

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Reem alkamash

Today I will talk about my skills: When I was younger I loved painting a lot and I participated in art exhibitions. When I grew up and completed my studies, my love of painting didn't stop I did not stop my love for painting and I was registered in the drawing department of an engineering institute. This finally brought me brought me finally to the world of engineering and completed my studies I completed my studies and graduated from the Faculty of Civil Engineering.

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Your last sentence is a bit of a "run-on" sentence in English. It is not grammatically incorrect, but it sounds better to split up long sentences, or in this case multiple events, into two sentences. I see you speak Arabic! My فصحى is poor, but I have noticed that in Arabic, sentences tend to be much longer and a well written Arabic sentence could be much longer than in English. You can have long sentences in English, very good sentences in fact, but long sentences can easily end up being poor writing in English. This is especially true if there are multiple series of events in time and it turns into a list of events.

With your sentence, perhaps you could write something like this: "This finally brought me to the world of engineering. I then went on to complete my studies and graduate from the Department of Civil Engineering" (at least in the U.S., we usually would say "department". Faculty generally refers to the people who teach in the department).

I hope this is not discouraging! Your last sentence is still fine how you wrote it. I only made a comment because it was a pattern I noticed when studying Arabic, and I had to remember to combine my sentences when writing in Arabic rather than separating them out like I would in English. 

I hope my comments are of some help. Best of luck with your practice! 

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