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Classical music concert at the "Areião" slum It is known that, among several issues, government is responsible for establishing health policies. Nevertheless, there are some policies which, although labeled as health policy, does not seem particularly suited to improve people's health. Approximately 30 days ago, I received a brochure from city hall conveying information about a performance of the "Catira's Orchestra", which took place today at "Favela do Areião", a slum of my home town, "Ceres". Considering I am fond of classical music, I decided to attend the event. Just as I, a multitude went to the concert, but differently of me, people did not seemed content listening classical music. Matter in fact, a few of them were aggressive and had expressed their discontent shouting and yelling. I guess they possibly thought that the "Catira's Orchestra" would play country music. At a given moment the dissatisfaction triggered a violence outburst and not even the instruments remained intact. Many people were hospitalized and I was very lucky for managed hiding beneath the stage. Like I said before, I do not understand how some government policies could be considered as health policies. Although the concert was dedicated to people's wellness, it is clear that it was not a good choice for the specific public of "Favela do Areião". Further it begot health costs with hospitalizations, besides the former expenditure with the Orchestra's presentation.

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Classical music concert at the Areião slum

It is known that, amongst several other responsibilities, issues, government is responsible for establishing health policies. Nevertheless, there are some policies which, although labeled as health policy policies, does do not seem particularly suited to improving people's health. Approximately 30 days ago, I received a brochure from City Hall conveying with information about a performance of the Catira's Orchestra, which took place today at Favela do Areião, a slum of my home town, Ceres. Considering As I am fond of classical music, I decided to attend the event. A crowd went to the concert just as I did, a multitude went to the concert, but differently of unlike me, people did not seemed content listening to the classical music. As a matter in of fact, a few of them were aggressive and had expressed their discontent by shouting and yelling. I guess they possibly thought that the Catira's Orchestra would play country music. At a given moment The dissatisfaction unrest triggered a violence outburst and not even the instruments orchestra remained intact. Many people were hospitalized, and I was very lucky managing to hide for managed hiding beneath the stage. Like As I said before, I do not understand how some government policies could be considered as health policies. Although the concert was dedicated to people's wellness, it is clear that it was not a good choice for the specific public audience of the Favela do Areião. Further, it begot incurred health costs with hospitalizations, besides as well as the former expenditure with of the orchestra's presentation.

 you do not need  " "  around the name of the orchestra, the venue or your home town.   But very good!  :-)

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