First notebook entry: Introducing myself
My name is vivien , i am come from Beijing China , and my work is about advertisement , so i am a girl with ridiculous thoughts and vigour.
I have worked in a 4A ad company based in Japany, but i want to go to the one which is working by english, so i want to improve it.
Certainly i really want to make more friends with the other country. For that we can know more with eachother about the culture,local customs and practices and so on.
Thanks
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Hi Vivien, Your sentences sound good. I really like the phrase "ridiculous thoughts" but I am not sure it is exactly what you mean. By the way, your writing will be more fresh and clear if you use short simple sentences. Here are my suggestions:
"My name is Vivien. I come from Beijing China. I work in advertising field, so I have lots of energy and a unique outlook on life. I work for a company that does advertising in Japan, but I plan to change to a company the does more work in English. That;s why I want to improve my English. I really want to make more friends from other countries. We can learn more about each others culture, local customs, practices and so on. "
Hope this helps. -Eric
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First notebook entry: Introducing myself
My name is vivien , i am come from Beijing China , and my work is about advertisement , so i am a girl with ridiculous thoughts and vigour.I have worked in a 4A ad company based in Japan, but i want to go to the one which is working by english, so i want to improve it.
Certainly i really want to make more friends with the other country. For that we can know more with eachother about the culture,local customs and practices and so on.
Thanks
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