today in school (Please help me to correct it, tks)
Today is Tuesday. It rained in the morning. Everyone is normally working (or. turning on? ). I am walking in the school. There are many different flowers. And caterpillars are out after raining. They are laying on the leaves, and eating leaves. There is a green spider on the web on the tree. It is spinning a web. There has a bug on the web, but the spider didn't to eat it immediately, it keeping spinning the web until finish the web to whole.
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today in school (Please help me to correct it, tks)
Today is Tuesday. It rained this in the morning. Everyone is People normally usually work on Tuesdays working (or. turning on? ). I am As I walked walking in the to school,. There are many I saw many different flowers as well as caterpillars on trees. are out after raining. TheyThe caterpillars are were laying on the leaves, and eating the leaves. There iswas also a green spider on the spinning a web on the a tree. It is spinning a web. There has was a bug on the web, but but the spider didn't to eat it - instead, immediately, it keeping kept spinning the its web until finish the web to it was whole.Good job ! Be careful with your tenses. You used "past tense" and then went to "present". You have to keep to one tense :) Also, when writing in English, a paragraph should = 2 to 3 sentences (maybe 4) . A paragraph must = one topic and idea. Your point about people working, didn't really fit into the paragraph (as the subject of your paragraph is about you walking to school and what you saw on the way) hence I removed it.
These are just suggestions. There are also other ways to write this that other people might suggest as well. Keep it up!
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