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When people traveling, visiting museums is always the priority for them. For example, many tourists definitely visit Louvre when they go to French. Always you can see museums are crowd with a large number of tourists from all over the world. And I believe that why people like to visit museums is mainly for culture and economic factor.
First, the exhibition in museums can represent the culture of that country. This is the fastest way for people to understand one country. For example, Imperial palaces museum in Beijing have many antique from The Qing Dynasty in China, these can represent Chinese culture by looking at its design or the painting. By analyzing the subject in the painting, people can know ancient life in China.
Second, visiting museums is the cost-effective way to travel. Most of the museums are funded by governments, so the ticket price for museums is extremely low. People can just spend around 1 to 5 dollars to hang around all day in museums. So going to museums is the best choice for tourists who do not want to spend a lot of money on the trip.
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Part One
When some people travel, visiting museums is always a(1) priority for them. For example, many tourists definitely visit the(2) Louvre when they go to France. Always You can always see museums which are crowded(3) with a large number of tourists from all over the world. And I believe that why people like to visit museums is mainly for cultural (4)and economic reasons.(5)Hi PengLi,
How are you today? Let's focus on Part One of your writing.
(1) Since we are writing about a priority of tourists in general, it is "a" priority. If we are referring to a specific person, it would be "the" priority.
(2) Here, you are referring to a very specific and famous tourist attraction in France. We use "the".
(3) "France" is the name of the European country. The word "French" is used as an adjective to refer to the citizens of France or products made in France (french-made wine)
(4) "crowded" is an example of a verb that actually functions like an adjective instead. We call them "participle adjective".
(5) "Culture" is a noun. We use "cultural" as an adjective to refer to the kind of "reason" (noun).
(6) I changed your "factors" to "reasons", as I thought it is more specific in meaning. "factors" means variables that will affect an outcome. "Reasons" means an explanation for an outcome or phenomenon.
Example
The factors affecting success in life may include: family background, self-motivation and moral principles.
The reason for his downfall was his pride.
Notice how these two words are used to convey two different ideas.
Hope this helps.
Cheers,
Lance
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Part Two
Firstly, the exhibition in museums can represent the culture of that country. This is the fastest way for people to understand one a country. For example, the Imperial Palace Museum in Beijing has many antiques from the Qing Dynasty in China. These antiques can represent the Chinese culture by their looking at its designs or the paintings. By analyzing the subjects in the paintings, people can know study / learn about ancient life in China.Secondly, visiting museums is a cost-effective way to travel. Most of the museums are funded by governments, so the ticket prices for museums are extremely affordable low. People can just spend around between one and five dollars 1 to 5 dollars to hang around all day in a museum. So going to museums is the best choice for tourists who do not want to spend a lot of money on their trips.
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