The sea and the coal mine
Yesterday I was in my house listening radio and they displayed two very sad songs. One of them talked about the death and heaven. Suddenly I started to think in all death people in my own family. Most of them have died by natural reason, but two did drastically.
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The sea and the coal mine
Yesterday I was in my house listening radio and they displayed two very sad songs. One of them talked about the death and heaven. Suddenly I started to think in all death people in my own family. Most of them have died by natural reason, but two did drastically.Yesterday, I was in my house listening to the radio and two very sad songs played. One of them talked about death and heaven, and suddenly I started to think about all the death in my own family. Most of them died by natural causes, but two of them died drastically.
maybe you should replace the word drastically with something else?
I also combined the sentences highlighted in yellow, because "one of them talked about death and heaven, seems a bit like a run on sentence to me... darn those run ons.... :D
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