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I have a dream I wish a world without weapons. A world where the life of people counts more than the money. Politician who do a good, selfless job. In this dreamworld, war is a foreign word. In this dreamworld, we respect nature and their animals. We give nature time for recreation. People who lives in this world aren' t egoists. They all help each other to create a better life. To live in peace together. To live in harmony with nature. A way together.

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I have a dream

I wish for a world without weapons. A world where the life of people, counts more than the money. Politicians who do a good, selfless job. In this dreamworld, war is a foreign word. In this dreamworld, we respect nature and their  its animals. We give nature its time to  for   recreation recreate. People who lives in this world aren't egoists egotists. They all help each other to create a better life. To live in peace together. To live in harmony with nature.

A way together.  
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Thank you guys!
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Also, it's "People who live", not "lives"
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Great piece, I agree! A few very picky items: 1) I would delete "the" before "money." That just seems how people say it. 2) Delete "their" before "animals." For that matter, since "animals" is part of nature, maybe you want to say something like, "We respect nature -- the animals, trees, and natural beauty of our planet." Whatever! 3) I wasn't sure what "we give nature time for recreation" meant. Perhaps "We let nature alone"?? Also 4) I think "dream world" is actually two words. See what you think! Not trying to be super-critical, just trying to help you get it EXACTLY right!
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Very well written, yet it oozes of a foreign perspective that I really appreciate. Great piece!

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