Please correct my description and improve it to make it more attractive
Hello, I want to participante in a competition and I need to persuade them of my idea, please correct my description and improve it to make it more attractive.
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My idea is about a mobile application of public transport reinvented to facilitate your daily journeys. This app will provide informations about bus, metro, tram and train stations with schedule and prices. In addition to student transport program "Cous" with all stations and destinations.
We want through this app to make the move in the city of Algiers easy for tourists as for citizens.
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Please correct my description and improve it to make it more attractive
Hello, I want to participante in a competition and I need to persuade them of my idea, please correct my description and improve it to make it more attractive.Easy Move
My idea is about for a mobile application of related to public transport reinvented that has been redesigned to facilitate your daily journeys. This app will provide informations about improve commuter experience for users of the bus, metro, and tram networks. and It will provide detailed information about timetables and prices for all stations on each line a well as information about the. train stations with schedule and prices. In addition to student transport program "Cous" with all stations and destinations.
We want this app to make getting around the move in the city of Algiers easy for tourists as well as for citizens.
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Please correct my description and improve it to make it more attractive> Please correct my essay and improve on it so (that) it sounds more natural.
Hello, I want to participate in a competition, butAn Easy Move ?
My idea is about a mobile application of public transport reinvented to facilitate your daily journeys. > My idea is to develop a mobile app that will facilitate commuters using public transports by giving them access to information that they will find very helpful for their daily commute./ My idea is about developing a mobile app ......
This app will provide information about bus, metro, tram and train stations with schedule and prices.> This app will provide commuters with instant access to information on the prices and schedules of the various public transports in a city : bus, metro, trams and trains.
In addition to student transport program "Cous" with all stations and destinations.???
We want through this app to make the move in the city of Algiers easy for tourists as for citizens.> With this app, we hope to help tourists as well as the locals to find their way around the city of Algiers with little difficulty./ We hope that, by using this app, the tourists as well as the locals of the city of Algiers will be able to travel around the city with less hassle.
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