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Anyone could kindly correct my notebook? Review question: Have you stayed at a really good hotel recently? If so, our readers would love to hear about it. Write a review, saying where the hotel is and what it is like. You should also tell us about its facilities ad why you would recommend it. I was in Athens two years ago, precisely in the second week of September 2014. There we, me and my father, were staying in a 4 starred hotel which looked,from the outside, very beautiful. It is located near the central square, on the right of the old parliament house. As we arrived in the hotels the entrance instantly caught our attention. It had a modern forniture, all red-scale colored which was elegantly accompained with cold colored flowers, this contrast made up a strange environment which was a pleasure to be seen and was a pleasure to be lived in the next few days. In the reception, 3 kindly women were instantly ready to match every requirement we had. Our bedroom was located in the front facade of the hotel, so we had a spectacular view on the Parliament, which in the evening was all lighted up with slighty-colored light-jokes. The bedroom forniture wasa mix of modern and old style. Sometimes those mixes could be bothering but in this case it was awsome. I would recommend this Hotel not only becuase it could make a good compromise between cost and geografical location in Athens but even because there you will make a comfortable staying all served up with an exquisite surrounding.

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Hello. Your writing is very good.  My comments are meant to help your writing be more fluid and less formal.  I'm at work so I will provide feedback in different sessions.-Gwyn


Anyone could kindly correct my notebook?

Review question: Have you stayed at a really good hotel recently? If so, our readers would love to hear about it.
Write a review, saying where the hotel is and what it is like. You should also tell us about its facilities ad why you would recommend it.


I was in Athens two years ago, precisely in the second week of September 2014. There we, me and my father, were staying in a 4 starred hotel which looked,from the outside, very beautiful.  This wording leads the reader to anticipate that you found the inside less the beautiful.


You could express yourself more simply with:

"Two years ago in September 2014, my father and I stayed at a 4 star hotel in Athens.  It was beautiful!"


It is located near the central square, on the right of the old parliament house. As we arrived in the hotels entrance instantly caught our attention.  

("in" is not needed.  hotel needs to show possession.  "...the hotel's entrance caught our attention."

It had a modern forniture, (furniture) all red-scale colored which was elegantly accompained (accompanied) with cold colored flowers, this contrast made up a strange environment which was a pleasure to be seen and was a pleasure to be lived in the next few days.
In the reception, 3 kindly women were instantly ready to match every requirement we had.
Our bedroom was located in the front facade of the hotel, so we had a spectacular view on the Parliament, which in the evening was all lighted up with slighty-colored light-jokes.
The bedroom forniture wasa mix of modern and old style. Sometimes those mixes could be bothering but in this case it was awsome.
I would recommend this Hotel not only becuase it could make a good compromise between cost and geografical location in Athens but even because there you will make a comfortable staying all served up with an exquisite surrounding.

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