TIME AFFECTS YOUR HUMOR?
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TIME AFFECTS YOUR HUMOR?
Well, scientists say yes. Research says that time affects our mood, because the human being is homeothermic, that is, has body temperature between 36°C and 37°C, becoming uncomfortable with temperatures below or above that.
There are many theories about what happens over these mood swings, but most researchers agree that they can be triggered by the brain's response to decreased light and the relationship with some hormones in the regulation of sleep-wake cycles, energy and mood, Such as serotonin and melatonin.
In winter, the lack of light causes a change in the production of melatonin, a hormone produced by the brain during the absence of light or at night. The production of this hormone causes symptoms of tiredness, drowsiness, indisposition and laziness, and that in great quantity in the organism can lead to depression.
Already the presence of the sun makes our brain produce serotonin, a neurotransmitter that regulates mood, sleep and also appetite. Consequently, people will be more willing to perform tasks, because the mood will be better. With this, there will also be an improvement in self-esteem, making the person more confident, motivated, and feeling good about life.
So summarizing everything, our mood is affected by the weather by two hormones that depending on the amount of light and heat that our body absorbs, leaves us happier and more willing as in spring and summer or more sad and lazy as in autumn and winter.
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TIME AFFECTS YOUR HUMOR?
Hi guys, I wrote this text for a school job [assignment], if you can correct the mistakes I made, I'll appreciate it :) [or "I'd appreciate it if you could correct my mistakes"].TIME AFFECTS YOUR HUMOR?
Well, scientists say yes. Research says that time affects our mood, because the human being is homeothermic, that is, has body temperature between 36°C and 37°C, becoming uncomfortable with temperatures below or above that.
There are many theories about what happens over these mood swings, but most researchers agree that they can be triggered by the brain's response to decreased light and the relationship with some hormones in the regulation of sleep-wake cycles, energy and mood, Such as serotonin and melatonin.
In winter, the lack of light causes a change in the production of melatonin, a hormone produced by the brain during the absence of light or at night. The production of this hormone causes symptoms of tiredness, drowsiness, indisposition and laziness, and that in great quantity in the organism can lead to depression.
Already the presence of the sun makes our brain produce serotonin, a neurotransmitter that regulates mood, sleep and also appetite. Consequently, people will be more willing to perform tasks, because the mood will be better. With this, there will also be an improvement in self-esteem, making the person more confident, motivated, and feeling good about life.
So summarizing everything, our mood is affected by the weather by two hormones that depending on the amount of light and heat that our body absorbs, leaves us happier and more willing as in spring and summer or more sad and lazy as in autumn and winter.
I marked the passages I find to be odd with blue.
In particular, "Time Affects Your Humor?" seems a bit unclear. I think using "weather" and "mood" suits your conclusion better.
And here's a rewrite example for your reference.
Does The Weather Affect Our Mood?
Well, scientists say so. Researches report that time cycles affect our mood, as the human being is homeothermic, that is, we have our body temperature maintained between 36°C and 37°C and become uncomfortable if it deviates above or below this range.
There are many theories about how these mood swings are created, but most researchers agree that they are triggered by the brain's response to decreased light, which is to change the balance of the hormones serotonin and melatonin which regulate the sleep-wake cycles as well as energy and mood.
In winter, the reduced amount of light causes a change in the production of melatonin, a hormone produced by the brain during the absence of light such as at nighttime. The production of this hormone causes symptoms such as tiredness, drowsiness, indisposition and laziness, and a great quantity can bring depression as well.
Meanwhile, the presence of sunlight makes our brain produce serotonin, a neurotransmitter that regulates mood, sleep, and appetite. The effect of this is that people become more active because they are in better mood. They will also experience heightened self esteem and feel more confident, motivated, and generally happy about life.
To summarize, our mood is affected by the weather because of the hormones serotonin and melatonin. In response to the amount of light and heat our body absorbs, they leave us happier and more upbeat, as in spring and summer, or gloomier and lazier, as in autumn and winter.
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