my first time to write an essay on the internet Recently , I finished to read a book named Fall of Giants. it's a half fiction and half realistic story. the story occurred in world war one. and c

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my first time to write an essay on the internet Recently , I finished to read a book named Fall of Giants. it's a half fiction and half realistic story. the story occurred in world war one. and characters comes out in the story are too much. and It's pretty complex story . there is particular german , British , and Russian come on the stage. their individual stories seem have no relationship. but always changing with the progress of war. and they got been related. same with their historic result. there are true winners. I thinks if we don't want to forget about history and let the catastrophe reoccur. reading book personally is a simple and efficient way. I love peace and I love somebody correct my mistakes. if u have read this book please tell me your feeling because of my poor english I haven't comprehended perfectly

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My first time to write an essay on the internet

Recently , I finished reading a book named "Fall of Giants". It's partly fiction and partly based on real events. The story occurred during World War I. There were too many characters in the story, and it was a pretty complex story. There are particular German, British, and Russian characters that come to the stage.* Their individual stories seem to have no relation but this was always changing with the progression of the war. And they finally joined together. The same is true of history. There are true winners. I think if we don't want to forget about history, and let the catastrophe reoccur, reading books is a simple and efficient way to prevent that. I love peace. I would love it if somebody would correct my mistakes. If you have read this book, please tell me your thoughts because, with my poor English, I haven't comprehended it perfectly.

Note: Be careful of your punctuation and capitalization. I think maybe you were on a smartphone, so I understand it's harder to make sure those things are perfect.

* "There are particular German, British, and Russian characters that come to the stage" <-- We would not normally say this, and the sentence would be completely rearranged. 'Stage' is also really only used for acting in a theater. Instead, we might say: "There were three characters in the book that we followed; a German, a British and a Russian."

TutorTracy: Congratulations on writing your first mini-essay! Keep up the hard work. :)

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