binhol's notebook entry: Jun 21, 2010

This afternoon i had a good time,i went to square with my friends to play skateboard,we are all fond of playing skateboard.moreover,i had making a new friend who from America.i chatted with him,but unfortunately my english is not very well,otherwise we could chat more time.

(There are several different way you can approach your introduction sentences. You can use an exclaimation point to emphasis that you had a good time, or you can combine your sentences into one.)

ex 1: This afternoon I had a good time! I went to the square with my friends to skateboard.
ex 2: This afternoon I had a good time (because) I went to the square to skateboard with my friends.

(You need to connect your sentences together by adding information from the previous few sentences - otherwise your thoughts will look random and out of place.)

We are all fond of skateboarding. While I was out with my friends, I made a new friend who is American. I chatted with him but unfortunately my English is not well developed so we could not chat very long.

binhol's notebook entry: Jun 21, 2010

This afternoon i had a good time,i went to square with my friends to play skateboard,we are all fond of playing skateboard.moreover,i had making made a new friend who's from America. i chatted with him,but unfortunately, my english is not very well good. Otherwise, we could have chatted more.