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Meditatation and reminiscine in a 2 hours' road trip I am on the way to my grandma's home. Looking out of the window in car, I watched the asure skies, rolling mountains, trees and fields. I couldn't help to think about all the road trips of the dreamy and amazing three month adventure last summer in America. I am so speechless in front of the great nature, feeling life is so good. I truly love nature. I would never have such strong feeling to nature without the most special experience in my life so far of exploring overseas. Spending a long time in car or plane always makes me meditate even if I have a little bit carsick sometimes. Listening to the same musics in car that I listened to at that time always makes me feel like I was back in adventure there.

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Meditatations and reminisces from a 2 hour road trip

I am on the way to my grandma's home.*

Looking out of the window in car, I watch the azure skies, rolling mountains, trees and fields. I can't help to think about all the road trips of the dreamy and amazing three month adventure last summer in America.

I am speechless before Nature, feeling life is so good. I truly love Nature. I would never have had such strong feeling towards Her without the most special experience in my life so far of exploring overseas. Spending a long time in a car or plane always makes me meditate even if I am a little bit carsick sometimes. Listening to the same songs in the car that I listened to then, always makes me feel like I was back in that adventure.

*This sets the scene for the next paragraph; the present. Usually, it is best not to switch verbs between past and present too often as it confuses.

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Excellent job, with a few issues pertaining mainly to spelling and parts of speech (noun, verb, adjective, etc). I’ve also made some suggestions to improve the style.


I’m making the corrections / suggestions in capital letters, since it’s easier for me than figuring out how to use bold print and funny colors :)



MediTATION and reminiSCENCE ON a TWO-HOUR road trip



I am on the way to my grandma's home. (OR "to Grandma's house")


Looking out (of) the CAR window, I watched (“WATCHED” IS USUALLY USED WITH THINGS THAT MOVE, SO IT MIGHT BE BETTER TO PUT “LOOKED AT,” “GAZED UPON,” “ADMIRED” OR “CONTEMPLATED”) the aZure skies, rolling mountains, trees and fields. I couldn't help THINKING about all the road trips of LAST SUMMER’S dreamy and amazing three month adventure in America. (YOU USED A LOT OF ADJECTIVES TO QUALIFY THE WORD “ADVENTURE….” I CHANGED “LAST SUMMER” TO THE POSSESSIVE AND PUT IT IN FRONT AS A MATTER OF STYLE, NOT A CORRECTION.)


I am so speechless in front of the greatNESS OF nature, feeling life is so good. I truly love nature. I would never have such strong feelingS FOR nature without the most special experience in my life so far of exploring overseas. (THE END OF THE LAST SENTENCE IS CORRECT, BUT SEEMS A BIT UNNATURAL. ALTHOUGH IT IS NORMALLY A GOOD IDEA TO VARY THE LENGTH OF SENTENCES, I WOULD RECOMMEND THAT YOU NOT GET TOO CARRIED AWAY. ALSO, I NOTICE THAT YOU TEND TO USE A LOT OF PREPOSITIONAL PHRASES, WHERE A NATIVE SPEAKER WOULD USE CLAUSES.) Spending a long time in A car or plane always makes me meditate, even if I GET a little bit carsick sometimes. SITTING in A car, Listening to the same SONGS (OR PIECES OF MUSIC — “MUSIC” IS UNCOUNTABLE IN ENGLISH) that I listened to (OR “HEARD”) at that time always makes me feel like I AM back THERE ON AN adventure.

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