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The Spring Festival<Chinese New Year> Today is The spring festival day.China tradtion day.This is my favioure day.Cause the thole family will be together to celebrate it.And this is my second time in Japan with my friend to celebrated.We went to the YOKOHAMA and ate the Chinese food.It just so delicious.But Chinese food in Japan is not authentic.If you want to eatauthentic Chinese food,You should go to China.After dinner,we went to the amusement park and take the ferris wheel.The view was so beautiful.We take lots of photo.Next year,I wish i can comeback to China spend time with my family.I miss them and love them. Happy new year to me.

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The Spring Festival

Today is day of the spring festival day.China's traditional day. (always a space after a full-stop)This is my favioure favourite day because (because is never used to start a full sentence, it is always used in the middle of a sentence.  Also, 'cause' is only used extremely informally and can sometimes sound strange)the thole whole family will be together to celebrate it. And ('And' is never used to start a full sentence, a good alternative word is 'also')This is also my the second time I have celebrated it in Japan with my friend to celebrated.We went to the ('the' is never used with real names of things such as places or restaurants)YOKOHAMA and ate the Chinese food. (space after full-stop)It was just so delicious(space after comma) but Chinese food in Japan is not authentic. If you want to eat authentic Chinese food you should go to China. After dinner, we went to the amusement park and take went on the ferriss wheel, where (this is better than a full-stop here. Too many short sentences make the writing flow not so easily, so sometimes joining sentences with linking words and commas makes the text better)the view was so beautiful so we took take lots of photos. Next year I wish i can come I want to go back to China to spend time with my family because I miss them and love them.


Happy new year to me.

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