The modern world relies on technological devices too much.
(Hello, could you please read my essay and correct me if I did something wrong? Thank you very much!)
Nowadays there are a lot of technological devices in our life, that certainly help people in many ways.
But is it bad that people rely on new technology so much?
In my opinion, it has never been bad! People create new technology to ease their life, but there's a dark side as well.
But all in order!
To start with, I want to pay your attention to the modern world. Life gets more and more easier, because new technology
provides us more and more smart devices, I think you know what a smartphone is! Does it help you to look for information
you need, or search for a TV programm you didn't manage to watch on TV? Maybe you use your smartphone to be aware of
the future weather or you could be a traveller, and accidentally get lost somewhere, but don't worry! Smarthone can help
you! But those all functions wouldn't be able without the greateast creation people have ever made! The Internet!
All new technologies, smartphones, computers, televisions, and probably your washing machine, have access to the Internet!
What do you think the world would be without the modern technology? I'll tell you! The World Wide Web, which now has most of
information and provides it for free, wouldn't be able! That's not all! Forget about immediate messages you send to your
friends! Well, time for letters writing, isn't? And I didn't say you no more able to watch your favourite films, listen to
the music you cannot imagine your life without. But it's just the Internet, there no cars, you have to wash your clothes
in a river, and of course, you just can't buy food for yourself, you have to hunt! It's not a joke, it's what people
used to do centuries ago!
So I think you've got an idea of the technology's importance in the modern world, haven't you? However, someone can say
technology has a dark side, for instance: overusing your smartphone or PC, as a result, damage your sight, more and more
people get their sight worse by sitting next to their computer too long, sometimes, just wasting their time. Furthermore,
there are even bigger problems we have to deal with, such as polluting cities' atmosphere by cars and dropping refuse in rivers and seas.
In conclusion, I would like to say: Human lives became easier once human beings invented the first tools, although someone says
people nowadays depend on technology too much, but I cannot say it's bad.
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The modern world relies on technological devices too much.
(Hello, could you please read my essay and correct me if I did something wrong? Thank you very much!)Nowadays there are a lot of technological devices in our life, that certainly help people in many ways.
But is it bad that people rely on new technology so much?
In my opinion, it has never been bad! People create new technology to ease their life, but there's a dark side as well.
But all in order!
To start with, I want to bring your attention to the modern world. Life gets easier and easier, because new technology
provides us with more and more smart devices. I think you know what a smartphone is! Does it help you to look for information
you need, or search for a TV programme you didn't manage to watch on TV? Maybe you use your smartphone to check on
the future weather or you could be a traveller, and accidentally get lost somewhere, but don't worry! Smartphones can help
you! But those all functions wouldn't be available without the greatest creation people have ever made! The Internet!
All new technologies, smartphones, computers, televisions, and probably your washing machine, have access to the Internet!
What do you think the world would be like without the modern technology? I'll tell you! The World Wide Web, which now has a hge amount of information and provides it for free, wouldn't be available! That's not all! Forget about instant messages you send to yourfriends! Well, there isn't time for writing letters, is there? And you wouldn't be able to watch your favourite films, listen to
the music you cannot imagine your life without. But it's just the Internet, there are no cars, you have to wash your clothes
in a river, and of course, you can't just buy food for yourself, you have to hunt! It's not a joke, it's what people
used to do centuries ago!
So I think you've got an idea of technology's importance in the modern world? However, someone can say
technology has a dark side, for instance: overusing your smartphone or PC, and as a result, damaging your sight. More and more
people damage their eyesight by sitting in front of their computer too long, sometimes just wasting their time. Furthermore,
there are even bigger problems we have to deal with, such as polluting cities' atmosphere with cars and dropping refuse in rivers and seas.
In conclusion, I would like to say: Human lives became easier once we invented the first tools, although some people say
people nowadays depend on technology too much, but I cannot say it's all bad.
(I cannot fit in in one note)
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nice article and the correction is also very good!
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