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Jim's Life Looking around his house, Jim have felt alone. He was old, his skin scarred by the time and all his hair already fell. Jim knew that he wouldn't live more much time. Then the old man started thinking about his life and felt the loneliness getting more and more strong in his heart. He remembered the smell of his childhood, of the innocent hugs and kisses that he had gave his mom. Jim thought in Mary his wife who died some years ago, remembered how he fell in love for her and their wedding, the birth of their children. It was like a film of the past and the one thing that he'd like in this moment was his memories, that old man was just waiting for the end. He knew, his time was coming and he was ready and free for it.

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Jim's Life

Looking around his house, Jim felt alone. He was old, his skin scarred by time and all his hair already fallen out. Jim knew that he wouldn't live much longer. Then the old man started thinking about his life and felt the loneliness getting more and more strong in his heart.
He remembered the smell of his childhood, the innocent hugs and kisses that he had given his mom. Jim thought about his wife Mary who had died some years ago, remembered how he fell in love* with her and their wedding, and birth of their children. It was like a film of the past and the one thing that he'd like in this moment was his memories. That old man was just waiting for the end. He knew his time was coming and he was ready and free for it.

*or, remembered how he had fallen in love with her..

He remembered x, y, z, .. , or, he thought of x, y, z, ..

Very well written!

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