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Your humble servant 2 The night, lying on the sand motionless and heavily, was gradually getting clear. The kibitkas were becoming reddish-brown, the stars was growing colder, and the donkey kept on braying, interrupting just for a minute sometimes. It looked like it would soon become clear and pale itself. The donkey fell silent only after the top of the copper-red sun had appeared at the side where there was a river. The donkey stretched its neck and began to touch with its soft lips all that was in front of its hoofs: a bit of dry manure, a flock, a piece of loam, a withered cane stock. A quiet fallen on the aul during dawn was so sudden that everybody being in the nearer kibitkas shuddered from head to foot. Some women peeked red tubes of their head-dresses out of the doors with female curiosity. As they thought it was a stranger’s donkey. It stood close by the pit chewing a leaf of kandym. A tent was located at the foot of the hill, and someone’s naked feet stuck out of mouth of the tent. The suntanned feet was laying on one another, flooded by the warm of the first rays of the sun.

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Your humble servant 2

The night, lying on the sand motionless and heavily heavy, was gradually getting clear. The kibitkas were becoming reddish-brown, the stars was were growing colder, and the donkey kept on braying, interrupting just for a minute sometimes. It looked like it would soon become clear and pale itself.
The donkey fell silent only after the top of the copper-red sun had appeared at the side where there was a river. The donkey stretched its neck and began to touch with its soft lips all that was in front of its hoofs: a bit of dry manure, a flock [what do you mean here?], a piece of loam, a withered cane stock [what do you mean here?].
A The quiet that had fallen on the aul during dawn was so sudden that everybody being in the nearer kibitkas shuddered from head to foot. Some women peeked red tubes [I don't think you mean tubes. Like tubes of toothpaste?] of their head-dresses out of the doors with female curiosity., as they thought it was a stranger’s donkey. It stood close by the pit, chewing a leaf of kandym. A tent was located at the foot of the hill, and someone’s naked feet stuck out of the mouth of the tent. The suntanned feet was were laying on one another, flooded by the warmth of the first rays of the sun.
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Yes, I would replace "loam" with "clay." In place of "aul" maybe you could say "village." I'm not sure if it is the same thing.
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Should I replase "loam" with "clay"? As for "aul" I have no idea what word it could be replaced with. :(
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This was fun to read. I want to point out that words like loam and aul would be totally unknown to most English speakers. I had to Google them to verify that they were real English words. That's not a bad thing, but I just thought that I should point it out.

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